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A local magazine editor has asked readers opinion. Write a letter to magazine editor. Describe what made you to choose this magazine? What do you like or dislike about it? What improvements do you want to see? v.2

A local magazine editor has asked readers opinion. Write a letter to magazine editor. Describe what made you to choose this magazine? What do you like or dislike about it? What improvements do you want to see? v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to your latest questioning about readers feedback. As you aware, your magazine is quite popular; personally, I have been purchasing it since 2014. Frankly speaking, I was going through hard period back then and I had decided to read something inspiring and saw the magazine “Psychology”. I had given it a shot and to my surprise, the magazine was incredible. Especially, I am fond of motivation articles and interviews with famous psychologists. For instance, there is an article by Labkovsky about relationships is very useful and contains plenty of practical advises in the latest issue of The Psychology magazine. However, from my point of view it is a serious drawback for the journal is that it does not give coverage to adolescent upbringing. As far as improvements concerned, I think that the periodical should cover more issues related to upbringing children and adolescents particularly. It is understood, that your readers as parents have some difficulties how to deal with teenagers and how to encourage them to follow right path. In addition, it will be helpful to add a column with stories of the readers who could write their stories of success. Thank you for your kind attention to our need. Yours sincerely, Maria Vlassova
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing with regard to your latest questioning about readers feedback.

As you aware, your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazine
is quite popular;
personally
, I have been purchasing it since 2014.
Frankly
speaking, I was going through
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
period back then and I had decided to read something inspiring and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazine
“Psychology”. I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
it a shot and to my surprise, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazine
was incredible.

Especially
, I am fond of motivation articles and interviews with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
psychologists.
For instance
, there is an article by
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Labkovsky
about relationships is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
useful and contains
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of practical advises in the latest issue of The Psychology
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
magazine
.
However
, from my point of view it is a serious drawback for the journal is that it does not give coverage to adolescent upbringing.

As far as improvements concerned, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that the periodical should cover more issues related to upbringing children and adolescents
particularly
. It
is understood
, that your readers as parents have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
difficulties how to deal with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
and how to encourage them to follow right path.
In addition
, it will be helpful to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
a column with stories of the readers who could write their stories of success.

Thank you for your kind attention to our need.

Yours
sincerely
,

Maria
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Vlassova
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter A local magazine editor has asked readers opinion. Write a letter to magazine editor. Describe what made you to choose this magazine? What do you like or dislike about it? What improvements do you want to see? v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
212 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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