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You’ve recently found an object and you think that it might be of some historical value. Write a letter to the director of the museum asking for some information on the object. - Give a description of that object. - Tell them where you found it. - Ask for v.2

You’ve recently found an object and you think that it might be of some historical value. Write a letter to the director of the museum asking for some information on the object. - Give a description of that object. - Tell them where you found it. - Ask for v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I, Divya, am writing this letter to get some information regarding the objects which I found nearby to my home a couple of days ago. In detail, I am a resident of Sholapur, Hyderabad for more than 22 years now. I recently found a few coins in my garden area, which are different from the modern era ones. Hence, I think they are of historical value. Not only were those found, but also a bowl with handles having ancient paintings was found. Moreover, I have tried to find information about them on the internet. However, I couldn’t get the details about the era of those coins, hence thought of asking you. Is it possible for you to let me know briefly about them because I am thinking to share these valuable things to my near and dear ones. I am sending you the coins and the bowl along with this letter. Please acknowledge back if they are of historical importance and if they could be exhibited in our local museum. I highly appreciate your swift response. Yours faithfully, Divya Shah
Dear Sir/Madam,

I, Divya,
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am
writing this letter to
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get
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some
information regarding the objects which I found nearby to my home a couple of days ago.

In detail, I am a resident of
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Sholapur
, Hyderabad for more than 22 years
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now
. I recently found a few coins in my garden area, which are
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different
from the modern era ones.
Hence
, I
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think
they are of historical value. Not
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only
were those found,
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but
also
a bowl with
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handles
having ancient paintings
was found
.

Moreover
, I have tried to find information about them on the internet.
However
, I couldn’t
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get
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about the era of those coins,
hence
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thought
of asking you. Is it possible for you to
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let
me know
briefly
about them
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because
I am thinking to share these valuable things to my near and dear ones.

I am sending you the coins and the bowl along with this letter.
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Please
acknowledge back if they are of historical importance and if they could
be exhibited
in our local museum.

I
highly
appreciate your swift response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Divya Shah
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You’ve recently found an object and you think that it might be of some historical value. Write a letter to the director of the museum asking for some information on the object. - Give a description of that object. - Tell them where you found it. - Ask for v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
181 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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