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Q: You will move to new city for work. You know some people who live there. Write a letter to one of your friends. In your letterAsk them for help finding accommodation, tell them where you would like to live and tell what type of place you are looking fo v.2

Q: You will move to new city for work. You know some people who live there. Write a letter to one of your friends. In your letterAsk them for help finding accommodation, tell them where you would like to live and tell what type of place you are looking fo v. 2
Dear Maria, It was pleasure to get your letter last week as always and I am happy to hear that your father has recuperated from long diseases. As you know that I was searching for job in New York and would be glad to hear that finally wish came true and I have been offered job in Pacific Insurance Company, having office at Commercial complex, city center. I have given my confirmation to join from 1st May’18. Now I would need help from you or lorna to find the flat for me. I do not want to impose on you or Lorna or Jeffery even for single day. Of course, we will meet quite often and chill on weekends. I think that area in which you are residing would be ideal for me as well because there are connecting trains to downtown. Moreover, all others transport medium such as cab, bus etc. are also available in anytime. I am looking for one room independent flat which should be preferably furnished as I do not want to transfer my all stuff to New York. Considering rental rates are so high, I would just get bare minimum stuff so that it could fit in small apartment. If you have any sight of vacant apartment as per my specification or you know any letting agency, please connect me as soon as possible. Look forward to get reply from you. Best Regards, Sama
Dear Maria,

It was pleasure to
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get
your letter last week as
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
always and
I am happy to hear that your father has recuperated from long diseases.

As you know that I was searching for job in New York and would be glad to hear that
finally
wish came true and I have
been offered
job in Pacific Insurance
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Company
, having office at Commercial complex, city center. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
my confirmation to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
from 1st May’18.
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Now
I would need
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
from you or
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lorna
to find the flat for me. I do not want to impose on you or Lorna or Jeffery even for single day.
Of course
, we will
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meet
quite
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often
and chill on weekends.

I
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think
that area in which you are residing would be ideal for me
as well
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because
there are connecting trains to downtown.
Moreover
, all others transport medium such as cab, bus etc. are
also
available in anytime. I am looking for one room independent flat which should be
preferably
furnished as I do not want to transfer my all stuff to New York. Considering rental rates are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
high, I would
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
bare minimum stuff
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that it could fit in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
apartment.

If you have any sight of vacant apartment as per my specification or you know any letting agency,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
connect me as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. Look forward to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
reply from you.

Best Regards,

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Sama
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter Q: You will move to new city for work. You know some people who live there. Write a letter to one of your friends. In your letterAsk them for help finding accommodation, tell them where you would like to live and tell what type of place you are looking fo v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
238 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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