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On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. v.3

On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to inform you that I have recently lost a mobile phone during my holiday in Pondicherry and this item is insured. It was an Apple iPhone X which cost me approximately 75, 000 rupees. Since I have insurance coverage for my mobile phone from your company, I am hoping to get my insurance money. The incident occurred when I was on a holiday trip to Pondicherry between 26 May 2020 to 29 May 2020. I was on the Paradise beach on 28 August when I lost my mobile phone in the sand. I vigorously searched for the item for more than an hour but it was nowhere. I immediately lodged an FIR in the nearest police station and the FIR registration number is CH-25470145. Since I hold insurance coverage for the mobile phone, I would like to claim the insurance amount for the lost phone. As per the policies of the insurance, I am liable to claim an amount of 62000 as an insurance refund for the lost item. Please find the invoice and the FIR copy for the lost mobile phone with this letter. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Aakash Saurabh
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I have recently
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lost
a mobile
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phone
during my holiday in Pondicherry and this item
is insured
. It was an Apple iPhone X which cost me approximately 75, 000 rupees. Since I have
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insurance
coverage for my mobile
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phone
from your
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company
, I am hoping to
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get
my
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insurance
money.

The incident occurred when I was on a holiday trip to Pondicherry between
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26 May 2020
to 29 May 2020. I was on the Paradise beach on 28 August when I
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lost
my mobile
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phone
in the sand. I
vigorously
searched for the item for more than an hour
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but
it was nowhere.
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I
immediately lodged an FIR in the nearest police station and the FIR registration number is CH-25470145.

Since I hold
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insurance
coverage for the mobile
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phone
, I would like to claim the
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insurance
amount for the
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lost
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phone
. As per the policies of the
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insurance
, I am liable to claim an amount of 62000 as an
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insurance
refund for the
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lost
item.
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Please
find the invoice and the FIR copy for the
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lost
mobile
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phone
with this letter.

I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Aakash
Saurabh
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter On a recent holiday, you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
205 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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