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Every year, someone in the company where you work is chosen as the best employee. Your manager has asked staff members to make suggestions about who should be chosen this year. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, •identify a colleague who you v.2

Every year, someone in the company where you work is chosen as the best employee. Your manager has asked staff members to make suggestions about who should be chosen this year. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, •identify a colleague who you v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to recommend the name of the employee in the organisation to be chosen as the best employee. According to me I would suggest the name of Adam Smith for the title of best employee in organisation as the best employee is the one who is more dedicated towards work and achieve all the goals within the deadline which I believe has been done by Adam Smith. Adam Smith is the Senior Sales Manager in IDFC Mutual Funds for the past 2 years and has worked in the organisation with full commitment. He has achieved all the objectives of the organisation with in the stipulated time frame and has worked towards the growth organisation. Moreover, he has brought a lot of business to the company by increasing the clientele. He should be awarded as the best employee as his dedicated and friendly attitude has motivated the junior employees to work with honesty and loyalty. Furthermore, he is a leader who not only set examples for the subordinated but also gives them the direction to work towards the growth of the organisation as well as for their personal growth. I hope my suggestion will help you in selecting the best employee. Yours sincerely, Prabhpreet Kaur
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to recommend the name of the
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employee
in the
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organisation
to
be chosen
as the
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best
employee.

This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using "in my opinion" or "I think".
According to me
I would suggest the name of Adam Smith for the title of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
best
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
in
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organisation
as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
best
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employee
is the one who is more dedicated towards work and achieve all the goals within the deadline which I believe has
been done
by Adam Smith.

Adam Smith is the Senior Sales Manager in
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IDFC
Mutual Funds for the past 2 years and has worked in the
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organisation
with full commitment. He has achieved all the objectives of the
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organisation
with in the stipulated time frame and has worked towards the growth
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organisation
.
Moreover
, he has brought
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a lot of
business to the
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company
by increasing the clientele.

He should
be awarded
as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
best
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
as his dedicated and friendly attitude has motivated the junior
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employees
to work with honesty and loyalty.
Furthermore
, he is a leader who not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
set examples for the subordinated
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but
also
gives them the direction to work towards the growth of the
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organisation
as well
as for their personal growth.

I hope my suggestion will
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help
you in selecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
best
employee.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Prabhpreet
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Kaur
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS letter Every year, someone in the company where you work is chosen as the best employee. Your manager has asked staff members to make suggestions about who should be chosen this year. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, •identify a colleague who you v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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