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You successfully passed a job interview You have to join by 15th November but you will not be able to do so Write a letter to your new boss In your letter explain your situation express your concerns suggest solutions v.2

You successfully passed a job interview You have to join by 15th November but you will not be able to do so Write a letter to your new boss In your letter explain your situation express your concerns suggest solutions v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, First of all, I really appreciate for giving me the opportunity to serve your company as a Software engineer. Yesterday, I received my joining letter stating that I have to join the office by the 15th of November. I am writing this letter to inform you that I will not be able to join the office due to unavoidable situation. Allow me to elaborate, on Friday, I was riding a bike and returning from the health club, during that time I met with an accident and I got injured. As our family doctor is giving me the best treatment and advised me to take at least a one-week bed rest to recover quickly. Therefore, I am not able to attend the office for the aforementioned date. As I know that your company hired me for one of the important projects and the deadline is quite near to complete the assignment. I can understand your company situation. Furthermore, to cover up the pending task, I can assure that I am planning to spend an extra two hours daily after my joining. I am quite certain that I will complete the pending work during that time. Moreover, if require I would like to work from home to communicate with the client and team. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Deepak Sharma
Dear Sir/Madam,

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I
really
appreciate for giving me the opportunity to serve your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
as a Software engineer. Yesterday, I received my joining letter stating that I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the office by the 15th of November. I am writing this letter to inform you that I will not be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the office due to unavoidable situation.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Allow
me to elaborate, on Friday, I was riding a bike and returning from the health club, during that time I met with an accident and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
injured. As our family doctor is giving me the best treatment and advised me to take at least a one-week bed rest to recover
quickly
.
Therefore
, I am not able to attend the office for the aforementioned date.

As I know that your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
hired me for one of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
projects and the deadline is quite near to complete the assignment. I can understand your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
situation.

Furthermore
, to cover up the pending task, I can assure that I am planning to spend an extra two hours daily after my joining. I am quite certain that I will complete the pending work during that time.
Moreover
, if require I would like to work from home to communicate with the client and team.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Deepak Sharma
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You successfully passed a job interview You have to join by 15th November but you will not be able to do so Write a letter to your new boss In your letter explain your situation express your concerns suggest solutions v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
230 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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