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You are going to spend your vacation in a city in a foreign country. You have never been there before. Your cousin has a friend who lives there. v.1

You are going to spend your vacation in a city in a foreign country. You have never been there before. Your cousin has a friend who lives there. v. 1
Dear Ethan, Hope you are doing great. I am Pollard Jeremy, a maternal cousin of Gill from Canada and have heard a lot about you from him. I am writing to say hello and get some information about Melbourne, where I will visit next month with my wife and daughter. Gill must have informed you that I might write to you and I truly appreciate your time as I know you are terribly busy. However, when I mentioned my trip to Gill, he enthusiastically recommended you. You might remember me from the wedding ceremony of Gill last year when he introduced you to me. I am planning to spend some quality time in Melbourne where I solely intend to spend the summer holidays with my family. I have done some online research and learned a few things about Melbourne but this is my first trip to Australia and I thought you would be the best person to recommend me some hotels, tourists spots, child-friendly amusement parks and dining places. I intend to stay for around one month and would like to be on my budget. Are there any tips for daily commuting? What type of dresses should we bring to Melbourne during this time? I do not know anybody there and your tips would be a great help to me. No more today. Stay fine and write back to me at your convenience. Warm wishes, Pollard
Dear Ethan,

Hope you are doing great. I am Pollard Jeremy, a maternal cousin of Gill from Canada and have heard a lot about you from him. I am writing to say hello and
get
some
information about Melbourne, where I will visit
next
month with my wife and daughter.

Gill
must
have informed you that I might write to you and I
truly
appreciate your time as I know you are
terribly
busy.
However
, when I mentioned my trip to Gill, he
enthusiastically
recommended you. You might remember me from the wedding ceremony of Gill last year when he introduced you to me.

I am planning to spend
some
quality time in Melbourne where I
solely
intend to spend the summer holidays with my family. I have done
some
online research and learned a few things about Melbourne
but
this is my
first
trip to Australia and I
thought
you would be the best person to recommend me
some
hotels, tourists spots, child-friendly amusement parks and dining places.
I
intend to stay for around one month and would like to be on my budget. Are there any tips for daily commuting? What type of dresses should we bring to Melbourne during this time?

I do not know anybody there and your tips would be a great
help
to me.

No more
today
. Stay fine and write back to me at your convenience.

Warm wishes,

Pollard
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are going to spend your vacation in a city in a foreign country. You have never been there before. Your cousin has a friend who lives there. v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
235 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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