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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to the businessman. In your letterRemind v.6

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to the businessman. In your letterRemind v. 6
Dear John, How are you? I am Jack Dane. Do you recall our acquaintance on board flight DC 365 last week which departed from New York to Washington? If it ring any bells to you, I’m writing to let you know that I would like to take your hand of friendship with regards to the job opportunity in one of your lucrative restaurants that you have suggested on that day. After careful consideration, I have decided to choose my career as a supply chain analyst in your organisation. I have done my Masters in Business and Finance in the year 2001 followed by 15 years of successful career as a senior analyst in Amazon, an e-commerce company. I am sure that I can thrive in hotelier industry as I have excellent exposure in dealing with inventory and warehousing management through use of several techniques like: FIFO- first in-first out method which will avoid spoilage of perishable goods, JIT- just in time inventory management where goods are ordered based on demand only and finally, WCM- world class manufacturing technique where waste will be reduced by eliminating activities which cause it. Hope you find my profile interesting and awaiting your reply. Faithfully, Jack Dane
Dear John,

How are you? I am Jack Dane. Do you recall our acquaintance on board flight DC 365 last week which departed from New York to Washington? If it
ring
any bells to you, I’m writing to
let
you know that I would like to take your hand of friendship
with regards to
the job opportunity in one of your lucrative restaurants that you have suggested on that day.

After careful consideration, I have decided to choose my career as a supply chain analyst in your
organisation
. I have done my Masters in Business and Finance in the year 2001 followed by 15 years of successful career as a senior analyst
in Amazon
, an e-commerce
company
.

I am sure that I can thrive in hotelier industry as I have excellent exposure in dealing with inventory and warehousing management through
use
of several techniques like: FIFO-
first
in-
first
out method which will avoid spoilage of perishable
goods
, JIT-
just
in time inventory management where
goods
are ordered
based on demand
only
and
finally
,
WCM
- world
class
manufacturing technique where waste will be
reduced
by eliminating activities which cause it.

Hope you find my profile interesting and awaiting your reply.

Faithfully
,

Jack Dane
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to the businessman. In your letterRemind v. 6

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
201 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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