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As part of a student social survey project, you are organising a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available. v.1

As part of a student social survey project, you are organising a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am an A-level student from R. V. College of Arts, Bangalore. As part of the student social survey project, we are planning to visit the historical exhibition that you are arranging in your town. I am writing to you to seek more details about the exhibition. I understand this is a historical exhibition, but please elucidate on its content, such as, whether this exhibition focuses on any particular period of history, and what the highlights of the exhibition are. Please also inform how students can benefit from visiting it. Could you also apprise me of the exhibition dates and timings? Finally, inform me if it will be closed on weekends or not. As I mentioned, I am planning this tour for a group of students, so would it be possible for us to get any discount on group booking or perhaps for students? If so, please notify me of the discount we are eligible for. I would be highly obliged if you could provide these details at your earliest so that I can start making the transport and accommodation arrangements. Thank you in advance. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Prashant Kaur
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am an A-level
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student
from R. V. College of Arts, Bangalore. As part of the
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social survey project, we are planning to visit the historical exhibition that you are arranging in your town. I am writing to you to seek more
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details
about the exhibition.

I understand this is a historical exhibition,
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but
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please
elucidate on its content, such as, whether this exhibition focuses on any particular period of history, and what the highlights of the exhibition are.
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Please
also
inform how
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students
can benefit from visiting it. Could you
also
apprise me of the exhibition dates and timings?
Finally
, inform me if it will
be closed
on weekends or not.

As I mentioned, I am planning this tour for a group of
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students
,
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so
would it be possible for us to
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get
any discount on group booking or perhaps for
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students
? If
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so
,
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please
notify me of the discount we are eligible for.

I would be
highly
obliged if you could provide these
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details
at your earliest
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so
that I can
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start
making the transport and accommodation arrangements.

Thank you in advance. I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Prashant
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Kaur
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IELTS letter As part of a student social survey project, you are organising a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available. v. 1

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  American English
8 paragraphs
199 words
6.5
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