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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the com v.7

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the com v. 7
Dear Sir/Ma' am, I am writing to give my opinion on - either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts- the company seeking feedback from the local population. I am the resident of this locality since my childhood, and I know the enthusiasm and talent; children' s of our community have. They are desperate for football and some of the players playing so admirably. company decision for finance the sport' s team for two years will give many of them the podium to manifest themselves. Although, the decision to finance for the concert is also respectable in order to entertain the public who won' t much enjoy the sports. As per my opinion, I would like to give my preference to sponsoring a sports team for two years. This will boost the confidence and the future opportunity for children' s, which is most required rather than the entertainment. I look forward to hearing back from you, and whatever is your decision is respectable, but I voted for sports team sponsorship. Yours truly, Pallavi
Dear Sir/
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I am writing to give my opinion on
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either to sponsor a local children’s
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sports
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team
for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts- the
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company
seeking feedback from the local population. I am the resident of this locality since my childhood, and I know the enthusiasm and talent;
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children&
#039; s of our community have. They are desperate for football and
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some of the
players playing
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so
admirably
.
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company
decision for finance the
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sport&
#039; s
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team
for two years will give
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many
of them the podium to manifest themselves. Although, the decision to finance for the concert is
also
respectable in order to entertain the public who
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won&
#039; t much enjoy the sports.

As per my opinion, I would like to give my preference to sponsoring a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
team
for two years. This will boost the confidence and the future opportunity for
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children&
#039; s, which is most required
rather
than the entertainment.

I look forward to hearing back from you, and whatever is your decision is respectable,
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but
I voted for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
team
sponsorship.

Yours
truly
,

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Pallavi
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the com v. 7

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5.5
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