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A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. v.2

A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. v. 2
Dear Samantha, I'm so glad to receive your letter yesterday in which you stated that you are planning for a week-long trip. I've got a perfect place in my mind just for you and John. I'm sure you want to make your holiday trip memorable. I had been to Copenhagen, Denmark last summer and it was a great place to be. Copenhagen is a place I cherished so much. It has so much style and beauty, and a dose of good fresh air. I stayed at the Hotel Sanders, opposite the stage door of the Royal Danish Theatre. It had glamorous touches in an otherwise homely space. Their menu is celestial. The first place I visited was Rosenborg Castle- which is 400 years old and was built in the Renaissance style. The Town Hall is another magnificent place on Radhus Square where the zero kilometre stone is located. I absolutely loved a 3-hour sightseeing tour of Copenhagen by bus and boat. I recommend you do the same and see the Danish capital's famous attractions on a narrated coach tour. It would not cost you much but you will love the experience. Finally, I must mention the food I enjoyed there. With so many hot dog stands all over the city, it’s not hard to notice locals’ love for sausages. Not only they are super tasty but also a cheap solution to fill hunger while roaming around the city. One food you must enjoy is Falafel. I wish you a great trip. Take care and write me back when you are free. Warm wishes, Barbara
Dear Samantha,

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glad to receive your letter yesterday in which you stated that you are planning for a week-long trip. I've
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a perfect
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in my mind
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just
for you and John.

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'm sure you want to
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make
your holiday trip memorable.
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I
had been to Copenhagen, Denmark last summer and it was a great
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place
to be. Copenhagen is a
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place
I cherished
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so
much. It has
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much style and beauty, and a dose of
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good
fresh air.

I stayed at the Hotel Sanders, opposite the stage door of the Royal Danish
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Theatre
. It had glamorous touches in an
otherwise
homely space. Their menu is celestial. The
first
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place
I visited was
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Rosenborg
Castle- which is 400 years
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and
was built
in the Renaissance style. The Town Hall is another magnificent
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on
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Radhus
Square where the zero
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kilometre
stone
is located
.

I
absolutely
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loved
a 3-hour sightseeing tour of Copenhagen by bus and boat. I recommend you do the same and
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see
the Danish capital's
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attractions on a narrated coach tour. It would not cost you much
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you will
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love
the experience.

Finally
, I
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mention the food I enjoyed there. With
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so
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hot dog stands all over the city, it’s not
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to notice locals’
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for sausages. Not
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they are super tasty
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also
a
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cheap
solution to fill hunger while roaming around the city. One food you
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must
enjoy is Falafel.

I wish you a great trip. Take care and write me back when you are free.

Warm wishes,

Barbara
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS letter A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
263 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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