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You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from someone who knew you when you were at school. v.2

You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from someone who knew you when you were at school. v. 2

Dear Mr George, Hope you and your family are doing well. I am Mark Thomas, one of your past students, writing for your reference for a job I am going to apply to. I am hoping that you would write me a recommendation letter that my prospective employer is expecting. I am delighted to inform you that I am applying for a position in Morgan's Incorporation. This is a dream job for me and working for a reputable company like Morgan's Incorporation will enable me to gain valuable experiences and give wings to my career. One of the requirements for applying to this job is a reference letter from a known person from my school whose words count. Being an international student, I don't know many people here who are worthy of such a recommendation. I will highly appreciate if you provide me with a reference letter which requires some basic information about me and my studies and how can I be a suitable candidate for the junior executive position in an international company. The company needs this letter before the end of July. I would like to request you to provide me with the letter as early as possible. I will be indebted to you for the favour. Yours sincerely, Mark Thomas

Dear Mr George,

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letter
 that my prospective employer is expecting.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am delighted
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company
 like Morgan's Incorporation will enable me to gain valuable experiences and give wings to my career.

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letter
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many
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people
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letter
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some
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company
. The This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
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letter
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before
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end
 of July.

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letter
 as early as possible. I will be indebted
 to you for the Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.favor
favour
.

Yours sincerely
,

Mark Thomas

0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from someone who knew you when you were at school. v. 2

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

212 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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