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Your neighbour has been making a lot of noise recently. This has been causing you problems, and you want to ask them to stop. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: -ask for an explanation for the noise-explain the problems this has caused for yo v.1

Your neighbour has been making a lot of noise recently. This has been causing you problems, and you want to ask them to stop. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: -ask for an explanation for the noise-explain the problems this has caused for yo v. 1
To keep the business running smoothly is the aim of every boss. And in order to achieve this goal, business owners sometime don’t bother about public off days and they don’t hesitate to call their employees, even in those days which they plan to spend with their families. I personally assume that this strategy is important if there is some deadline to meet otherwise this deteriorate the morale of the people working with that organization. This essay will analyse the impact of the consumption of non-working days in work environment using examples of Oxford University research and Time Magazine survey to demonstrate points and support claims. On the one hand, every commercial domain have to achieve some targets and failing to fulfil those targets will result in the collapse of that domain. Furthermore, these outputs are sometimes required so early that managers have to prioritize the work over leisure activities, therefore, resulted in calling the people at work when they are not willing to come. For example, an Oxford University research in 2016 clearly shows that commercial empires need their employee’s dedication in order to compete with their rivals. So, it is clear that worker’s dedication is must in order to achieve targets even for that they have to work in the days for which they are not supposed to work. On the other hand, calling people so much by their bosses may mentally disturb them. Additionally, this sometimes results in the isolation from their families or friends if certain job demands your 24 hour attention. For instance, Time Magazine in January 2016 surveyed about increased depression in certain people and find out that 80 % cases complained about the too much involvement of jobs in their personal lives which sometime let them think that they are like robots. So, from this example, it is clear that personal life is also as important as work life, and it’s useless to disturb someone during its vacation timing if not required. To conclude, I believe that if owners start thinking about the people who are working for them and value their social life, similarly, if the employer needs help to achieve some deadline it’s the liability of workers to dedicate themselves to achieve that goal.
To
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keep
the business running
smoothly
is the aim of every boss. And in order to
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achieve
this goal, business owners
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sometime
don’t bother about public off
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days and
they don’t hesitate to call their employees, even in those days which they plan to spend with their families. I
personally
assume that this strategy is
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important
if there is
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some
deadline to
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meet
otherwise
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this deteriorate
the morale of the
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people
working with that organization. This essay will
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analyse
the impact of the consumption of non-working days in
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work
environment using examples of Oxford University research and Time Magazine survey to demonstrate points and support claims.

On the one hand, every commercial domain
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have to
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achieve
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some
targets and failing to fulfil those targets will result in the collapse of that domain.
Furthermore
, these outputs are
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sometimes
required
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so
early that managers
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have to
prioritize the
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work
over leisure activities,
therefore
, resulted in calling the
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people
at
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work
when they are not willing to
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come
.
For example
, an Oxford University research in 2016
clearly
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shows
that commercial empires need their employee’s dedication in order to compete with their rivals.
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So
, it is
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clear
that worker’s dedication is
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must
in order to
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achieve
targets even for that they
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have to
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work
in the days for which they are not supposed to work.

On the other hand
, calling
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people
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so
much by their bosses may mentally disturb them.
Additionally
, this
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sometimes
results in the isolation from their families or friends if certain job demands your
When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "24-hour"
24 hour
attention.
For instance
, Time Magazine in January 2016 surveyed about increased depression in certain
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people
and find out that 80 % cases complained about the too much involvement of jobs in their personal
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lives
which
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sometime
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let
them
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think
that they are like robots.
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So
, from this example, it is
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clear
that personal life is
also
as
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important
as
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work
life, and it’s useless to disturb someone during its vacation timing if not required.

To conclude
, I believe that if owners
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start
thinking about the
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people
who are working for them and value their social life,
similarly
, if the employer needs
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help
to
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achieve
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some
deadline it’s the liability of workers to dedicate themselves to
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achieve
that goal.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Your neighbour has been making a lot of noise recently. This has been causing you problems, and you want to ask them to stop. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: -ask for an explanation for the noise-explain the problems this has caused for yo v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
373 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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