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Usually, novels, magazines and poetry are considered the three major formsof literature. Which one do you prefer and explain why you prefer thisliterature form. Please include specific examples and details in yourexplanation. v.1

Usually, novels, magazines and poetry are considered the three major formsof literature. Which one do you prefer and explain why you prefer thisliterature form. Please include specific examples and details in yourexplanation. v. 1
To be benefited from any public service, anybody have to pay, not only to visit museums and watch how was the ancient life and culture, but in order that to increase the quality of services of museums. Thus, it seems to me that, the benefits of paying to get a ticket to stay at museums are more than the drawbacks. Firstly, the disadvantages of paying to see museums are minor and can be considered. The most important drawback is that, the people who suffer from poverty cannot attend the activities of buildings, but this can be handled by the management of museums. For instance, if a poor family has the passion to stay at a particular gallery, they can give an evidence to the manager's office of the museum that they cannot pay the fees for the tickets, and the manager will subsidize their ticket funds to be able to take a tour at the museum. Moreover, museums are places where the public visit and spend their time. So, it is logic to pay for the entertainment and enjoy your time. Not only the local residents who go to halls, also the tourists who inspect a nation have more passionate to learn more about the history of the city the visit, so the institutions must provide them with high quality service. For example, a group of tourists see a particular museum and the tour guide was awful, because he was not well paid, consequently, they were disappointed and their reviews and feedback about the place were abominable, therefore, the number of guests decreased and the government paid a lot of money to a private company to increase the skills of the guides. So, how can the ministry of antiquities neglect that huge gain and make the admission free? . To sum up, museums' tickets are very profitable to the country and doing it for free will make government to pay more, hence, they have to take care about everything related to museums starting from cleanness, contents, and the services too.
To
be benefited
from any public
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service
, anybody
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have
to
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pay
, not
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only
to visit
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museums
and
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watch
how was the ancient life and culture,
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but
in order that to increase the quality of
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services
of
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museums
.
Thus
, it seems to me that, the benefits of paying to
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get
a
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ticket
to stay at
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museums
are more than the drawbacks.

Firstly
, the disadvantages of paying to
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see
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museums
are minor and can
be considered
. The most
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important
drawback is that, the
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people
who suffer from poverty cannot attend the activities of buildings,
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but
this can
be handled
by the management of
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museums
.
For instance
, if a poor family has the passion to stay at a particular gallery, they can give an evidence to the manager's office of the
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museum
that they cannot
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pay
the fees for the
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tickets
, and the manager will subsidize their
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ticket
funds to be able to take a tour at the museum.

Moreover
,
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museums
are places where the public visit and spend their time.
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So
, it is logic to
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pay
for the entertainment and enjoy your time. Not
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only
the local residents who go to halls,
also
the tourists who inspect a nation have more passionate to learn more about the history of the city the visit,
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so
the institutions
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must
provide them with high quality
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service
.
For example
, a group of tourists
Possible agreement error. Did you mean "sees"? (Some collective nouns can be treated as both singular and plural, so 'see' is not always incorrect.)
see
a particular
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museum
and the tour guide was awful,
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because
he was not well paid,
consequently
, they
were disappointed
and their reviews and feedback about the place were abominable,
therefore
, the number of guests decreased and the
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government
paid
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a lot of
money to a private
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company
to increase the
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skills
of the guides.
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So
, how can the ministry of antiquities neglect that huge gain and
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make
the admission free?
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.


To sum up, museums'
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tickets
are
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very
profitable to the country and doing it for free will
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make
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government
to
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pay
more,
hence
, they
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have to
take care about everything related to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museums
starting from cleanness, contents, and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
services
too.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Usually, novels, magazines and poetry are considered the three major formsof literature. Which one do you prefer and explain why you prefer thisliterature form. Please include specific examples and details in yourexplanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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