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Your local council is considering closing a sport and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money, Write a letter to the local council, in your letter, Give details of how you and your friends or family use the center. Explain the why the center is i v.2

Your local council is considering closing a sport and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money, Write a letter to the local council, in your letter, Give details of how you and your friends or family use the center. Explain the why the center is i v. 2
Dear Sir, In intend to write this letter to grab your attention to an important concern. It is heard that the sports center situated in our area is going to be shutdown. I would like to tell you that all community residents strongly oppose this idea as this center is the only entertainment place for the families living here. The center is always crowded with families living nearby, where they spend quality time with their kids and elders. This center provides certain leisure services under one roof such as fine-dining, play area for toddlers and sports club for youngsters. I would like to assert my point that demolishing the sports center will be detrimental. As this place provides an opportunity to all the residents to mingle up and extend their social circle. Furthermore, this place also provides affordable luxury to most of the salaried class families here, who cannot afford to go to expensive play areas and restaurant every week. This sports center also paves ways for good sportsperson of this community by recommending them to official sports teams such as national cricket and football selection teams. This decision will close the opportunity door for talented children of this area. This place is not only visited by young people but also retired people meet here every day, where they enjoy their evening tea and watch children playing. Therefore, please review this matter and revert your decision. Yours Truly, Sam
Dear Sir,

In intend to write this letter to grab your attention to an
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important
concern. It
is heard
that the
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sports
center situated in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
is going to be shutdown. I would like to
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tell
you that all community residents
strongly
oppose this
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idea
as this center is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
entertainment
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place
for the families living here. The center is always crowded with families living nearby, where they spend quality time with their kids and elders. This center provides certain leisure services under one roof such as fine-dining, play
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
for toddlers and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
club for youngsters.

I would like to assert my point that demolishing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
center will be detrimental. As this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
provides an opportunity to all the residents to mingle up and extend their social circle.
Furthermore
, this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
also
provides affordable luxury to most of the salaried
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class
families here, who cannot afford to go to expensive play
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areas
and restaurant every week.

This
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sports
center
also
paves ways for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
sportsperson of this community by recommending them to official
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
teams such as national cricket and football selection teams. This decision will close the opportunity door for talented children of this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
This
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place
is not
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only
visited by young
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people
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but
also
retired
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people
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meet
here every day, where they enjoy their evening tea and
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watch
children playing.
Therefore
,
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please
review this matter and revert your decision.

Yours
Truly
,

Sam
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Your local council is considering closing a sport and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money, Write a letter to the local council, in your letter, Give details of how you and your friends or family use the center. Explain the why the center is i v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
238 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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