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Your friend's dog has recently passed away. Write a letter to console your friend. In your letter: Express your sympathyInclude memories you have about the dogInvite your friend to do something with youWrite at least 150 words. You do NOT need to w v.1

Your friend's dog has recently passed away. Write a letter to console your friend. In your letter: Express your sympathyInclude memories you have about the dogInvite your friend to do something with you You do NOT need to w v. 1
It is often argued that the advancement in technology provides a medium of interaction among people, whilst others disagree and believe that the frequent usage of technology paves the way to an introvert personality. However, I agree with the former viewpoint in this essay and discuss both the opinions with examples. The advent of the internet has bridged the long-distance communication gap between friends and families. As a result, one can connect to anyone and anywhere on this planet with the click of a button. Social networking site such as Facebook is a prime example of this, where individuals can follow the updates of their friends and interact with each other without any geographical barrier. Therefore, cutting-edge technology is a worthwhile tool to be socially active. On the other hand, there are certain people who hold a different opinion and think that the excess use of technology deprives of real human interaction, which is an important aspect of every bond. For example, modern children prefer to spend their time playing mobile games rather than playing outdoor games. As a result, they do not get a chance to communicate with the children of their age by sitting at home all day long after schools. However, I believe that human interaction is still possible by playing online games such as chess and pool with friends and playing these games also improves the level of cognition. In addition to this, individuals can also join the online groups of their interest to share their ideas and thoughts with each other. Therefore, this essay disagrees that technology should be dismissed for this reason. To conclude, while technological advancements keep people closer and socially connected, some still feel that it as a reason for a communication gap. However, as long as we are careful about its right usage, the social benefits are clearly positive.
It is
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often
argued that the advancement in
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technology
provides a medium of interaction among
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people
, whilst others disagree and believe that the frequent usage of
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technology
paves the way to an introvert personality.
However
, I
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agree
with the former viewpoint in this essay and discuss both the opinions with examples.

The advent of the internet has bridged the long-distance communication gap between friends and families.
As a result
, one can connect to anyone and anywhere on this planet with the click of a button. Social networking site such as Facebook is a prime example of this, where individuals can follow the updates of their friends and interact with each
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other
without any geographical barrier.
Therefore
, cutting-edge
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technology
is a worthwhile tool to be
socially
active.

On the
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other
hand, there are certain
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people
who hold a
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different
opinion and
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think
that the excess
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use
of
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technology
deprives of real human interaction, which is an
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important
aspect of every bond.
For example
, modern children prefer to spend their time
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playing
mobile
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games
rather
than
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playing
outdoor
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games
.
As a result
, they do not
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get
a chance to communicate with the children of their age by sitting at home all day long after schools.
However
, I believe that human interaction is
still
possible by
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playing
online
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games
such as chess and pool with friends and
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playing
these
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games
also
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improves
the level of cognition.
In addition
to this, individuals can
also
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join
the online groups of their interest to share their
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ideas
and thoughts with each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
.
Therefore
, this essay disagrees that
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technology
should
be dismissed
for this reason
.

To conclude
, while technological advancements
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keep
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people
closer and
socially
connected,
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some
still
feel that it as a reason for a communication gap.
However
, as long as we are careful about its right usage, the social benefits are
clearly
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positive
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Your friend's dog has recently passed away. Write a letter to console your friend. In your letter: Express your sympathyInclude memories you have about the dogInvite your friend to do something with you You do NOT need to w v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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