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You are going on holiday next week and you need to ask your friend to watch your dog while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -state how long you will be away, -tell them what needs to be done. -state how you will compensate them. v.1

You are going on holiday next week and you need to ask your friend to watch your dog while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -state how long you will be away, -tell them what needs to be done. -state how you will compensate them. v. 1
In many parts of the world, some people are receiving a hefty amount of money as remunerations. It is often argued by some that it is justified because it portrays the image of a country’s recognition for hard work. Meanwhile, others still claim that wages should not exceed above a specified range by the government for equal monetary distribution among all. This essay will explore both sides of the argument before drawing a logical opinion. On the one hand, supporters of high salaries believe that this way results in a good reputation of the country. If high wages were given to people, it would attract talented and hardworking people from all over the world, which results in the prosperity of the country. Take an example of private organizations in Norway, which are famous for giving high wages, where competition is high because thousands of people apply for the job each year, and almost half of the workforce consists of foreign employees. Thus, giving a huge amount is to an extent beneficial for nations. On the other hand, the advocates of the view that governmental authorities should limit salaries believe in the circulation of money among all classes. Since an extremely high salary would increase polarity among the upper and lower class, resulted in chaos and anarchy in society. For instance, in Bangladesh, where managers were getting heavy wages, while blue-collar workers were getting a negligible amount of money, which was the sole reason for the birth of loathing for the upper class. Hence, governmental elites should put a bar on higher salaries. However, from my perspective, nations can benefit a lot in terms of better reputation in the world, but this would increase the gap between wealthy, and poor segments of society which further creates social problems. To sum up, even though high salaries are effective for countries and attract people from the world over, but I believe the government should put a limit on extremely high wages in order to maintain a balance among all.
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are receiving a hefty amount of money as remunerations. It is
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argued by
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it portrays the image of a
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country’s
recognition for
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hard
work. Meanwhile, others
still
claim that wages should not exceed above a specified range by the
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government
for equal monetary distribution among all. This essay will explore both sides of the argument
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before
drawing a logical opinion.

On the one hand, supporters of
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high
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salaries
believe that this way results in a
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good
reputation of the
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country
. If
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high
wages were
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given
to
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people
, it would attract talented and hardworking
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people
from all over the
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world
, which results in the prosperity of the
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country
. Take an example of private organizations in Norway, which are
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for giving
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wages, where competition is
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high
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because
thousands of
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people
apply for the job each year, and almost half of the workforce consists of foreign employees.
Thus
, giving a huge amount is to an extent beneficial for nations.

On the other hand
, the advocates of the view that governmental authorities should limit
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salaries
believe in the circulation of money among all classes. Since an
extremely
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high
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salary
would increase polarity among the upper and lower
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class
, resulted in chaos and anarchy in society.
For instance
, in Bangladesh, where managers were getting heavy wages, while blue-collar workers were getting a negligible amount of money, which was the sole reason for the birth of loathing for the upper
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class
.
Hence
, governmental elites should put a bar on higher salaries.

However
, from my perspective, nations can benefit a lot in terms of better reputation in the
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world
,
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but
this would increase the gap between wealthy, and poor segments of society which
further
creates social problems.

To sum up,
even though
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high
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salaries
are effective for
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countries
and attract
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people
from the
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world
over,
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but
I believe the
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government
should put a limit on
extremely
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high
wages in order to maintain a balance among all.
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IELTS essay You are going on holiday next week and you need to ask your friend to watch your dog while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -state how long you will be away, -tell them what needs to be done. -state how you will compensate them. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
336 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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