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Your friend wants to send her his children to your house for the weekend Write a letter to him her and say Agree to this arrangement Say what time is suitable for you Describe what you are planning to do v.1

Your friend wants to send her his children to your house for the weekend Write a letter to him her and say Agree to this arrangement Say what time is suitable for you Describe what you are planning to do v. 1
Education plays a major role in children's growth. The Right to Education is the basic necessity for every child. This can be achieved either at home or at school. This essay will discuss the merits of both methods. Homeschooling is not only best for a child's development, but also improves time management. Children can get more attention at the house and will focus on their subjects effectively. In addition to that, parents can set specific learning and teaching methods based on their child's learning ability. For instance, some children will learn a new language in three months while some may take up to six months. So, parents can use their teaching time productively. Teaching children at school plays a crucial role in their social behaviour. Children must be allowed to interact with each other so that they will adapt to a new environment quickly and comfortably. In the future, this quality will be an immense help for them to do any team work in an Organization. For example, children will come up with more ideas when working as a group rather than working alone for project work. They can make new friends to share their ideas and to implement them. So, teaching children at home will provide better social life with their family. Having said that, both methods have their influence on children in many ways. However, I strongly believe teaching children at school is more advantageous than at home. Children must leave their nest and fly out with colourful wings into the world.
Education plays a major role in children's growth. The Right to Education is the basic necessity for every child. This can
be achieved
either at home or at school. This essay will discuss the merits of both methods.

Homeschooling is not
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only
best for a child's development,
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but
also
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improves
time management.
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Children
can
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get
more attention at the
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house
and will focus on their subjects
effectively
.
In addition
to that, parents can set specific learning and
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teaching
methods based on their child's learning ability.
For instance
,
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some
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children
will learn a new language in three months while
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some
may take up to six months.
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So
, parents can
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use
their
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teaching
time
productively
.

Teaching
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children
at school plays a crucial role in their social
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behaviour
.
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Children
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must
be
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allowed
to interact with each other
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so
that they will adapt to a new environment
quickly
and
comfortably
. In the future, this quality will be an immense
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
for them to do any team work in an Organization.
For example
,
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children
will
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come
up with more
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ideas
when working as a group
rather
than working alone for project work. They can
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make
new friends to share their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and to implement them.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
,
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teaching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
at home will provide better social life with their family.

Having said that, both methods have their influence on
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children
in
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many
ways.
However
, I
strongly
believe
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teaching
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children
at school is more advantageous than at home.
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Children
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must
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leave
their nest and
fly
out with
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colourful
wings into the world.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Your friend wants to send her his children to your house for the weekend Write a letter to him her and say Agree to this arrangement Say what time is suitable for you Describe what you are planning to do v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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