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you have just spent a weekend at a friend's house. When you returned home, you discovered you have left a coat containig some belongings in his house. Write a letter to your friend telling him that you left the coat. Tell him what coat look like, whe v.1

you have just spent a weekend at a friend's house. When you returned home, you discovered you have left a coat containig some belongings in his house. Write a letter to your friend telling him that you left the coat. Tell him what coat look like, whe v. 1
Nowadays, it is increasingly common, people buy new things and throw-away old stuff. This trend causes a negative impact on the environment. This essay will discuss the reasons of a throwaway society, including advertisements and busy lifestyle of people. This essay will also discuss the problems that are arising, such as; pollution and depletion of natural resources. To begin with, advertisement is the main reason that people manipulate by new products and buy only that things can be used for a short period of time. The most probably endorsement companies use celebrities to promote their products in the market. Therefore, people are attracted by new features of the substance and innocent people to compete the community buy new products for a comfortable lifestyle. Furthermore, hectic schedule is the predominant reason for a throwaway society. This is because of, people do not get time to repair or clean the things. Therefore, they give preference to use and throw. For example, Indian researchers found that 70% people the usage of disposable dishes in the kitchen instead of, silver or stone. After use they put away in the garbage. Disposable products the most perhaps not recyclable. Nevertheless, it leads to abuse the environment and extinction of natural resources. Due to disposable products, the garbage found in large quantity, that entire rubbish cannot be restored, that gives birth to the natural disaster. Consequently, people are suffering from many diseases, namely; cancer and skin problems. Moreover, the natural resources are also running out, because some disposable things are made of the wood. That is why, deforestation taking place, and it is doing the end of homes of wild animals. In conclusion, throwaway society is a serious concern. It is caused by ads on social media and the busy life of people. Therefore, environmental pollution and depletion of natural resources are becoming concerned across the world.
Nowadays, it is
increasingly
common,
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people
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buy
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new
things and throw-away
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old
stuff. This trend causes a
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negative
impact on the environment. This essay will discuss the reasons of a
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throwaway
society, including advertisements and busy lifestyle of
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people
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
This
essay will
also
discuss the problems that are arising, such as; pollution and depletion of
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natural
resources.

To
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begin
with, advertisement is the main reason that
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people
manipulate by
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new
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products
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
that things can be
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used
for a short period of time. The most
probably
endorsement
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companies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
celebrities to promote their
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products
in the market.
Therefore
,
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people
are attracted
by
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new
features of the substance and innocent
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people
to compete the community
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
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new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
for a comfortable lifestyle.

Furthermore
, hectic schedule is the predominant reason for a
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throwaway
society. This is
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because
of,
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people
do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
time to repair or clean the things.
Therefore
, they give preference to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
and throw.
For example
, Indian researchers found that 70%
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people
the usage of disposable dishes in the kitchen
instead
of, silver or stone.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
The comma is probably missing here: "use, they".
use they
put away in the garbage. Disposable
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products
the most perhaps not recyclable.

Nevertheless
, it leads to abuse the environment and extinction of
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natural
resources. Due to disposable
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products
, the garbage found in large quantity, that entire rubbish cannot
be restored
, that gives birth to the
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natural
disaster.
Consequently
,
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people
are suffering from
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many
diseases,
namely
; cancer and skin problems.
Moreover
, the
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natural
resources are
also
running out,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
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some
disposable things
are made
of the wood.
That is
why, deforestation taking place, and it is doing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of homes of wild animals.

In conclusion
,
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throwaway
society is a serious concern. It
is caused
by ads on social media and the busy life of
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people
.
Therefore
, environmental pollution and depletion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
resources are becoming concerned across the world.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay you have just spent a weekend at a friend's house. When you returned home, you discovered you have left a coat containig some belongings in his house. Write a letter to your friend telling him that you left the coat. Tell him what coat look like, whe v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
310 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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