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Your friend has decided to switch careers, but is not sure which to choose. What advice would you give them? Provide reasons and examples to support your response. v.2

Your friend has decided to switch careers, but is not sure which to choose. What advice would you give them? Provide reasons and examples to support your response. v. 2
In my twenty' s, like others, I had a choice between choosing my career of engineering or teacher, which was completely different branch to switch between. At that time I talk with my close friends and family which to choose because I could not choose one of them. Finally, one of my friend suggest me solution to choose one. Hence, I would like to mention the tip that my friend told me once. First of all, she or he should ask himself which one is makes you more happy and motivated. If you happy and motivated, you will understand the subjects more easily and professionally. Or, if you do not know which one makes you happy, ask your family or friend, they might know you better than you because they observing you from different angle, not the angle you see yourself every day. Secondly, order the advantages and disadvantages of both career and analyse the results so that she or he can understand which one of more beneficial for him or her. For example, one career might be good for future, like possibility of development is fast but another one is interesting but there are less chance to develop. In this situation, see the other advantages and disadvantages you ordered. Lastly, in our life time, we spend one of third time on workplace or maybe more time so that choosing right job your lifestyle is important. Henceforth, check whether your job is fitting your lifestyle. Maybe, you love to spend weekend with family but it the job requires you to work weekend, that is breaking your lifestyle. This may be lead to sloping your life-cycle. In conclusion, I would recommend my friend above three advice for choosing future career. So that he or she would not have regret because she or he chosen their career wisely considering all statement and condition.
In my
twenty&
#039; s, like others, I had a choice between choosing my
career
of engineering or teacher, which was completely
different
branch to switch between. At that
time
I talk with my close
friends
and family which to choose
because
I could not choose one of them.
Finally
, one of my
friend
suggest me solution to choose one.
Hence
, I would like to mention the tip that my
friend
told
me once.

First of all
, she or he should ask himself which one is
makes
you more happy and motivated. If
you
happy and motivated, you will understand the subjects more
easily
and
professionally
. Or, if you do not know which one
makes
you happy, ask your family or
friend
, they might know you better than you
because
they observing you from
different
angle, not the angle you
see
yourself every day.

Secondly
, order the advantages and disadvantages of both
career
and
analyse
the results
so
that she or he can understand which one of more beneficial for him or her.
For example
, one
career
might be
good
for future, like possibility of development is
fast
but
another one is interesting
but
there are less chance to develop. In this situation,
see
the other advantages and disadvantages you ordered.

Lastly
, in our life
time
, we spend one of third
time
on workplace or maybe more
time
so
that choosing right job your lifestyle is
important
. Henceforth,
check
whether your job is fitting your lifestyle. Maybe, you
love
to spend weekend with family
but
it the job requires you to work weekend,
that is
breaking your lifestyle. This may be lead to sloping your life-cycle.

In conclusion
, I would recommend my
friend
above three advice for choosing future
career
.
So
that he or she would not have regret
because
she or he chosen their
career
wisely
considering all statement and condition.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Your friend has decided to switch careers, but is not sure which to choose. What advice would you give them? Provide reasons and examples to support your response. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
311 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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