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Your friend from another country is interested to visit your hometown. Write a letter to her and describe what’s the best time to visit. How she can enjoy her visit v.2

Your friend from another country is interested to visit your hometown. Write a letter to her and describe what’s the best time to visit. How she can enjoy her visit v. 2
Dear Sally, Hi, how are you doing there in Germany. I am writing to you because I am excited that you finally accepted my invitation to visit my home country. I think the best season that you should come is summer since that we can enjoy the picturesque scenery of the Philippines. So basically in this season you can enjoy most of your time here in the Philippines there are lot of places to visit and enjoy. My family are also anxious to meet you since this is the first I am going to introduce you to them. We could do some mountain trekking on Mount Ulap at Baguio, Benguet, visit some of the ancestral house in Vigan, Ilocos Sur, and we can do an island hopping in Hundred Island at Alaminos, Pangasinan. If you have any question regarding your stay here in the my country do no hesitate to call me at 1298390183 or email at bill@mail. com. I look forward seeing you take care. Best wishes, Bill
Dear Sally,

Hi, how are you doing there in Germany. I am writing to you
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because
I
am excited
that you
finally
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accepted
my invitation to visit my home country.

I
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think
the best season that you should
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come
is summer since that we can enjoy the picturesque scenery of the Philippines.
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So
basically
in this season you can enjoy most of your time here in the Philippines there are
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lot of
places to visit and enjoy. My family are
also
anxious to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you since this is the
first
I am going to introduce you to them.

We could do
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some
mountain trekking on Mount
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Ulap
at Baguio,
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Benguet
, visit
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
ancestral
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house
in
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Vigan
,
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Ilocos
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Sur
, and we can do an island hopping in
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Hundred
Island at
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Alaminos
,
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Pangasinan
.

If you have any question regarding your stay here in
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the my country
do no hesitate to call me at 1298390183 or email at
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bill@mail
.
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com
.

I look forward seeing you take care.

Best wishes,

Bill
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay Your friend from another country is interested to visit your hometown. Write a letter to her and describe what’s the best time to visit. How she can enjoy her visit v. 2

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
168 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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