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Do you agree of disagree with the following statement? Boys and girls should attend separate schools. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.3

Boys and girls should attend separate schools. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3
In many countries, such as UK and Japan, girls and boys still attend separate schools. I feel that this is not a great decision to make studies and life more convenient for both genders. This essay will further discuss reasons to support my standpoint and then deduce a logical conclusion. Firstly, back in time, separates school were a religious thing. Fifty years ago, men would not be around girl because they feel superior and they did not learn the same subject as girls. For our generation, staying with that model does not have any sense. If cleaning was studied only by girls decades ago, mathematics or literature are studied by everyone. In fact, everyone gets the same education. Secondly, people often say that putting barriers between girls and boys helps to the children’s concentration because for instance boys would not try to clown around to get girls' attention. As a matter of fact, it may be true sometimes because you cannot change human being. But yet one big advantage of this cohabitation is that boys gain maturity by being with girls. Then, even if boys and girls are separated during their education, they will need to work in pair afterwards. This separation can enhance the fact that lots of women, or even men, get victimized by their co-workers. As one gender may not be in contact for plenty of years with the other one, they can misinterpret friendship. For example, at school, projects are done in groups. If they are mixed, people will be used to work together. But if not, words can be misinterpreting. Nowadays, adults have a lot of troubles to understand each other, so if we create division, nothing will be fixed. To conclude, I strongly believe that co-education is beneficial to both of girls and boys and that our coexistence would not be easier with separated schools.
In
many
countries, such as UK and Japan,
girls
and
boys
still
attend separate
schools
. I feel that this is not a great decision to
make
studies and life more convenient for both genders. This essay will
further
discuss reasons to support my standpoint and then deduce a logical conclusion.

Firstly
, back in time, separates
school
were a religious thing. Fifty years ago,
men
would not be around
girl
because
they feel
superior and
they did not learn the same subject as
girls
. For our generation, staying with that model does not have any sense. If cleaning
was studied
only
by
girls
decades ago, mathematics or literature
are studied
by everyone. In fact, everyone
gets
the same education.

Secondly
,
people
often
say that putting barriers between
girls
and
boys
helps
to the children’s concentration
because
for instance
boys
would not try to clown around to
get
girls&
#039; attention. As a matter of fact, it may be true
sometimes
because
you cannot
change
human being.
But
yet
one
big
advantage of this cohabitation is that
boys
gain maturity by being with girls.

Then, even if
boys
and
girls
are separated
during their education, they will need to work in pair afterwards. This separation can enhance the fact that lots of women, or even
men
,
get
victimized by their co-workers. As one gender may not be in contact for
plenty
of years with the other one, they can misinterpret friendship.
For example
, at
school
, projects
are done
in groups. If they
are mixed
,
people
will be
used
to work together.
But
if not, words can be misinterpreting. Nowadays, adults have
a lot of
troubles to understand each other,
so
if we create division, nothing will be
fixed
.

To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that co-education is beneficial to both of
girls
and
boys
and that our coexistence would not be easier with separated
schools
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Boys and girls should attend separate schools. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
311 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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