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Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. Causes and solutions. v.3

Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. Causes and solutions. v. 3
It is true that with the growing alternation in the technology affected the world by converting it into a materialization. Hence, it would be resulted in the teenagers having a dominating behaviour. The essay will discuss about the main reasons for this and steps that are taken to avoid it. To begin with, the foremost cause is that momentarily, both parents are working as a result the children will spend their entire day alone and watch the TV and learn from that, particularly, because the parents having no time to spend with their children and even they were not ready to teach them what is the difference between good or bad. Moreover, the other reason is that in the modernized world most of the children what to acquire all new an electronic gadget that provides the latest features attracts them. Even the price of such item is high enough. To acquire these things, they are ready to do some offensive work to satisfy their needs. For example, the Internet also provides video which gives how to earn more money in less time by doing some wrong task. On the other side, to make the younger one more disciplined and obligations there are certain steps that must be taken by the parents and schools as well. The first precaution steps are that they need to continue guidance and parents has to spend time with the children give, them, nurture about the tradition like how people behave in the past with their oldster. By doing this they learn the discipline and after spending time they become oblige. The other precautionary idea is that the government should have to make straighten law in which bands shows which represent the criminal activities. For instance, the school also helps by conducting an extra class which shows the person as an ideal citizen by showing their behaviour. In conclusion, it can be analysed that a juvenile behaviour is changed by the some tv shows showing atrocity and leaving alone. This would be avoided by the strict instructing them. The government should also control this as everyone knows that the younger one is the future of the nation.
It is true that with the growing alternation in the technology
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affected
the world by converting it into a materialization.
Hence
, it would
be resulted
in the
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teenagers
having a dominating
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behaviour
. The essay will
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discuss about the
main reasons for this and steps that
are taken
to avoid it.

To
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begin
with, the foremost cause is that
momentarily
, both
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parents
are working
as a result
the
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children
will spend their entire day alone and
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watch
the TV and learn from that,
particularly
,
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because
the
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parents
having no
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time
to spend with their
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children
and even they were not ready to teach them what is the difference between
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good
or
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bad
.
Moreover
, the other reason is that in the modernized world most of the
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children
what to acquire all new an electronic gadget that provides the latest features attracts them. Even the price of such item is high
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enough
. To acquire these things, they are ready to do
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some
offensive work to satisfy their needs.
For example
, the Internet
also
provides video which gives how to earn more money in less
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time
by doing
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some
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wrong
task.

On the other side, to
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make
the younger one more disciplined and obligations there are certain steps that
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must
be taken
by the
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parents
and schools
as well
. The
first
precaution steps are that they need to continue guidance and
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parents
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has to
spend
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time
with the
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children
give, them, nurture about the tradition like how
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people
behave in the past with their oldster. By doing this they learn the discipline and after spending
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time
they become oblige. The other precautionary
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idea
is that the
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government
should
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have to
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make
straighten law in which bands
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shows
which represent the criminal activities.
For instance
, the school
also
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helps
by conducting an extra
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class
which
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shows
the person as an ideal citizen by showing their
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behaviour
.

In conclusion
, it can be
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analysed
that a juvenile
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behaviour
is
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changed
by the
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some
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tv
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shows
showing atrocity and leaving alone. This would
be avoided
by the strict instructing them. The
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government
should
also
control this as everyone knows that the younger one is the future of the nation.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Young people these days tend to be less polite and respectful than in the past. Causes and solutions. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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