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Young people prefer listening to music rather than listening to the news on the radio. Is this positive or a negative trend. provide reasons and examples for your opinion? v.3

Young people prefer listening to music rather than listening to the news on the radio. Is this positive or a negative trend. provide reasons and examples for your opinion? v. 3
Music plays an indispensable role in human being life. Mostly teenagers prefer hearing to music as compared to the news on a radio. In my opinion, people can relieve their stress level to listen to music and it is a largely positive trend but it has also some negative impact on them. It is certainly true that people can do whole things with the help of music. The main advantage is that as people listen to several kinds of music such as pop, jazz, folk, and even traditional music, this may help to get insight into distinctive cultures and languages instead of radio because of radio is less popular among young people these days. For instance, even if people commute to certain places, then they can easily spend their leisure time to listen to different music and people feel comfortable and relaxed. It has also a negative impact on youngsters life. In music, they can only listen to pop and jazz which are not essential for them, but on radio, there is innumerable news related to crimes, sports, and education which they could aware of whole things in their life. As a result, the majority of people would not know about what is happening around them, if a radio has not listened by humanity. The main reason to listen to music is that today people have a hectic schedule to do such work, thus they listen to music owing to which individuals want to relieve their stress level. In my perspective, both radio and music are joint endeavors due to both are equally important for the development of every person. To conclude, although it is a decent way to listen to different types of music because of young people can get a chance to enhance their knowledge of several things, yet also they should be concerned about demerits of music.
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music
as compared to the news on a
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radio
. In my opinion,
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people
can relieve their
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stress
level to
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to
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people
can do whole things with the
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music
. The main advantage is that as
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people
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listen
to several kinds of
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music
such as pop, jazz, folk, and even traditional
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music
, this may
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insight into distinctive cultures and languages
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is less popular among young
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these days.
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commute to certain places, then they can
easily
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to
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and
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feel comfortable and relaxed.

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life. In
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, they can
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to pop and jazz which are not essential for them,
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, there is innumerable news related to crimes, sports, and education which they
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could aware
of whole things in their life.
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people
would not know about what is happening around them, if a
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has not listened by humanity.

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is that
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people
have a hectic schedule to do such work,
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listen
to
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music
owing to which individuals want to relieve their
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stress
level. In my perspective, both
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radio
and
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music
are joint endeavors due to both are
equally
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important
for the development of every person.

To conclude
, although it is a decent way to
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to
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music
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because
of young
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people
can
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a chance to enhance their knowledge of several things,
yet
also
they should
be concerned
about demerits of
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music
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Young people prefer listening to music rather than listening to the news on the radio. Is this positive or a negative trend. provide reasons and examples for your opinion? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
310 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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