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Young people have been gradually far away from reading stories since they have access to a huge range of stories online in the form of video games or movies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.1

Young people have been gradually far away from reading stories since they have access to a huge range of stories online in the form of video games or movies. with the statement? v. 1
Young people have been gradually far away from reading stories since they have access to a huge range of stories online in the form of video games or movies. As a result, it seems teenagers and those in their early twenties are less likely to read. This essay will suggest two ways to encourage youngsters to be more interested in reading stories. To begin with, it’s important to address the kinds of things young people are interested in. Although some people will read regular stories about animals or adventures, they do not appeal to all due to the fact that topics chosen for a wide audience. Offering stories on a wide range of topics that are more of interest to youngsters is likely to result in more of these people reading them and increase the chance readers return to enjoy it. As a consequence, we can effectively encourage young people to read more stories. In addition, a change in length and divide the stories into chapters or episodes will help to persuade more youngsters to follow. This solution will create suspense for the reader, which attracts lots of attention without taking up too much of their time. Recent research shows that 60% of readers love series stories than normal ones. In conclusion, creating interactive stories and dividing stories into episodes may encourage more young people to read stories rather than watch them in films or on TV. I would suggest that interactive stories are likely to have the biggest impact as readers can participate and not just consume the story.
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people
have been
gradually
far away from reading
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stories
since they have access to a huge range of
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stories
online in the form of video games or movies.
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, it seems
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teenagers
and those in their early twenties are less likely to
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read
. This essay will suggest two ways to encourage youngsters to be more interested in reading stories.

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begin
with, it’s
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important
to address the kinds of things
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young
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people
are interested
in. Although
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some
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people
will
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read
regular
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stories
about animals or adventures, they do not appeal to all due to the fact that topics chosen for a wide audience. Offering
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stories
on a wide range of topics that are more of interest to youngsters is likely to result in more of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
reading them and increase the chance readers return to enjoy it. As a consequence, we can
effectively
encourage
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young
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people
to
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read
more stories.

In addition
, a
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change
in length and divide the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stories
into chapters or episodes will
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help
to persuade more youngsters to follow. This solution will create suspense for the reader, which attracts lots of attention without taking up too much of their time. Recent research
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shows
that 60% of readers
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love
series
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stories
than normal ones.

In conclusion
, creating interactive
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stories
and dividing
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stories
into episodes may encourage more
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young
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people
to
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read
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stories
rather
than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
them in films or on TV. I would suggest that interactive
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stories
are likely to have the biggest impact as readers can participate and not
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just
consume the
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story
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Young people have been gradually far away from reading stories since they have access to a huge range of stories online in the form of video games or movies. with the statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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