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young people enjoy more than the older. Therefore, I agree with this statement that young people enjoy life more than older people do v.2

young people enjoy more than the older. Therefore, I agree with this statement that young people enjoy life more than older people do v. 2
I do not have doubt that many olders people enjoy much the life, however I also do not have doubt that young people enjoy more than the older. Therefore, I agree with this statement that young people enjoy life more than older people do. Thus, I have two reasons to support my opinions. First, young people usually have more energy to do the things if compared with olders people. The corage, is a thing that the teenager have a lot, and this is a tool that increase the wish of then enjoy the life. For example, I and my friends were talking with our parents and we were comparing our life’s. We started talking about the courage of the people have to do the radical sports, and all of us that were young have courage to do, and only on mother said that had corage. They told us when they were more youngest they had corage, however today is not. Thus whith this meet I could percived that is of nature of young people. Second, the tecnology have encouraged the young people do things that make than enjoy the life. Since that have many places that are paradisiac and beatiful that can be observed in the Internet for the mobile, tablet and computer. This make young people try to travel to these places. For instance, the number of backpacker have increase in the world, in these people are young people. I read in a news peaper that young people have enjoyed the life travelling, and how many people don' t have enough money to travel they created a lot websites to help each other. In the interview that i read in a section in a newspaper, it was saying that there are some websites that you work in a place like a hostel and you can live to enjoy the place. The website have work to backpackers oround the world. In conclusion, I agree with this statement and I think that young people have enjoyed the life more than older, and that the tecnology have help the young tpeople to enjoy it.
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people
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more than
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do.
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, I have two reasons to support my opinions.

First
,
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usually
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with olders
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people
. The
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, is a thing that the
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teenager
have a lot, and this is a tool that increase the wish of then
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enjoy
the
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life
.
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, I and my friends were talking with our
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parents and
we were comparing our
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life’s
. We
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started
talking about the courage of the
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people
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do the radical sports, and all of us that were
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young
have courage to do, and
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only
on mother said that had
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corage
. They
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told
us when they were
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more youngest
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,
however
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this
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I could
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.

Second, the
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tecnology
have encouraged the
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people
do things that
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. Since that have
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places
that are
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paradisiac
and
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beatiful
that can
be observed
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in the Internet
for the mobile, tablet and computer. This
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.
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are
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have enjoyed the
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money to travel they created
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each other. In the interview that
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i
read in a section in a newspaper, it was saying that there are
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websites that you work in a
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place
like a hostel and you can
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live
to
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the
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. The website have work to backpackers
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oround
the world.

In conclusion
, I
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have enjoyed the
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more than
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, and that the
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tecnology
have
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13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Mistakes

IELTS essay young people enjoy more than the older. Therefore, I agree with this statement that young people enjoy life more than older people do v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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