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Globalization has many positive effects on world's economy but the negative effects cannot be forgotten. What is your point of view about this topic? v.2

Globalization has many positive effects on world's economy but the negative effects cannot be forgotten. What is your point of view about this topic? v. 2
Myriad of affirmative impacts could be seen on the economy of globe due to globalization; however, some school of thoughts deem that deleterious implications cannot be neglected. While local economy affects due to this development, I believe that perquisites in terms of availability of jobs at cheaper rate cannot be avoided. On the one hand, world has become a global village due to globalization. Owing to this, smaller businesses have to face plight to sell their products in local market because different items are available in the market at lower rate which are imported from other countries. Consequently, less preference is given to the local sellers which is perilous for the local economy. For example, in India, bearing manufacturing industries are in jeopardy because China is supplying the same product at cheaper rate. However, I believe that there are more benefits than drawbacks of globalization. On the other hand, a huge number of employment is provided to developing countries because of globalization. That is to say that many multi-national companies are establishing their manufacturing units in developing nations due to which unemployed people could easily fond a suitable job. Moreover, it will not only advantageous to the people of guest countries, but organizations are also benefited by recruiting employees at lower wages as compared to their native nations. To exemplify, Apple has built a manufacturing plant in India and gives job opportunities to thousands of people. In addition to that, Indians are working at lower annual package than Americans. Therefore, I believe that globalization has more positive implications on the world' s economy. In conclusion, it can be reiterated that though, local shop-keepers and businesses are facing difficulty to sell their products, I believe that better job opportunities as well as workers at cheaper rate are more productive. Furthermore, it is recommended that rules and regulations should be made by states to conserve the local businesses.
Myriad of affirmative impacts could be
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seen
on the economy of globe
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due
to globalization;
however
,
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some
school of thoughts deem that deleterious implications cannot
be neglected
. While
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local
economy affects
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due
to this development, I
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believe
that perquisites in terms of availability of
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jobs
at cheaper
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rate
cannot
be avoided
.

On the one hand, world has become a global village
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due
to globalization. Owing to this, smaller businesses
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have to
face plight to sell their products in
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local
market
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because
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different
items are available in the market at lower
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rate
which
are imported
from other countries.
Consequently
, less preference is
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given
to the
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local
sellers which is perilous for the
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local
economy.
For example
, in India, bearing manufacturing industries are in jeopardy
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because
China is supplying the same product at cheaper
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rate
.
However
, I
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believe
that there are more benefits than drawbacks of globalization.

On the other hand
, a huge number of employment
is provided
to
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developing countries
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because
of globalization.
That is
to say that
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many
multi-national
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companies
are establishing their manufacturing units in developing nations
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due
to which unemployed
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people
could
easily
fond a suitable
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job
.
Moreover
, it will not
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only
advantageous to the
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people
of guest countries,
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but
organizations are
also
benefited by recruiting employees at lower wages as compared to their native nations. To exemplify, Apple has built a manufacturing plant in India and gives
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job
opportunities to thousands of
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people
.
In addition
to that, Indians are working at lower annual package than Americans.
Therefore
, I
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believe
that globalization has more
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positive
implications on the
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world&
#039; s economy.

In conclusion
, it can
be reiterated
that though,
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local
shop-keepers and businesses are facing difficulty to sell their products, I
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believe
that better
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job
opportunities
as well
as workers at cheaper
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rate
are more productive.
Furthermore
, it
is recommended
that
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rules
and regulations should
be made
by states to conserve the
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local
businesses.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Globalization has many positive effects on world's economy but the negative effects cannot be forgotten. What is your point of view about this topic? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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