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TPO - 16Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. v.1

TPO - 16 The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. v. 1
Trave is Always good, but is better when you can do everthing that you want to do. Therefore, I don’t agree with this statement that the best way to travel is a group led by a tour guide. And I have two reason to reforce my opinions. First, is more expencive travel with a tour guide. Since that the people need pay for tour guide, the travel get more expensive. For example, in last year, I went to the beatch with my girlfriend, and we were looking for a tour guid to show the place for us. We find one that got we for differents places, however we spent a lot money. After that, I could see that is not always the tour guide is good because we didn’t see the beach that we wanted, and I get very desapointed. Second, people who travel with a tour guide, don’t have privacity. Since that people much time want to do the tour in a way that the tour guide doesn’t do, and sometimes this make the people a little sad. For instance, my friend Wanessa, traveled with his husband (Henrique), in this trevel that I am saying they were not merried yet. Hanrique was wanting to aky if Wanessa want get married with him, bus always have people near and he didn’t have a good time to ask this for her. Therefore, Henriqeu needed wait the night to ask to Wanessa. He tould me that never again he travel with a tour guide. However, how all in this life have contrast, there are some good poits to travel with a tour guide. Since the tour meet a lot of the places, they can say where you find somethink to you buy, where is the cheaper restaurant, wher is the best place to you stay and others things. Authough, I prefer have my privacity and make things that I want to do, because I always want fell fredoon. In conlusion, I don’t agree with this statement and i think that is best travel alone and without tour guide, since that you fill free and can go to anywhere in your own time.
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Trave
is Always
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good
,
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but
is better when you can do
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everthing
that you
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want
to do.
Therefore
, I don’t
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agree
with this statement that the best way to
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travel
is a group led by a
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tour
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guide
. And I have two reason to
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reforce
my opinions.

First
, is more
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expencive
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travel
with a
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tour
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guide
. Since that the
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people
need pay for
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tour
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guide
, the
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travel
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get
more expensive.
For example
, in last year, I went to the
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beatch
with my girlfriend, and we were looking for a
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tour
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guid
to
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show
the
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place
for us. We find one that
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got
we for
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differents
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places
,
however
we spent
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a lot money
. After that, I could
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see
that is
not always the
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tour
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guide
is
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good
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because
we didn’t
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see
the beach that we wanted, and I
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get
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very
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desapointed
.

Second,
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people
who
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travel
with a
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tour
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guide
, don’t have
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privacity
. Since that
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people
much time
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want
to do the
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tour
in a way that the
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tour
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guide
doesn’t do, and
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sometimes
this
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make
the
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people
a
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little
sad.
For instance
, my friend
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Wanessa
, traveled with his husband (Henrique), in this
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trevel
that I am saying they were not
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merried
yet
.
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Hanrique
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was wanting
to
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aky
if
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Wanessa
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want
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get
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married with
him, bus always have
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people
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near and
he didn’t have a
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good
time to ask this for her.
Therefore
,
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Henriqeu
needed wait the night to
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ask to
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Wanessa
. He
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tould
me that never again he
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "travels", "traveled", "travelled".
travel
with a
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tour
guide.

However
, how all in this life have contrast, there are
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some
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good
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poits
to
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travel
with a
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tour
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guide
. Since the
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tour
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meet
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a lot of
the
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places
, they can say where you find
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somethink
to you
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buy
, where is the cheaper restaurant,
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wher
is the best
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place
to
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you stay
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and others
things.
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Authough
, I prefer have my
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privacity
and
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make
things that I
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want
to do,
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because
I always
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want
fell
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fredoon
.

In
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conlusion
, I don’t
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agree
with this statement and
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i
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think
that is
best
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travel
alone and without
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tour
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guide
, since that you fill free and can go to anywhere in your
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own
time.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
33Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO - 16 The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
360 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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