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Some people say uniforms hinder children's personality at school and therefore, it should be banned. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people say uniforms hinder children's personality at school and therefore, it should be banned. v. 2
Learners personality is obstructed by uniforms. Owing to this, few people reckon that it should be prohibited. This essay disagrees with the statement because dress code spreads a sense of equality and assist to alleviate inferiority complex. To commence with, uniform helps to diminish the barriers which may affect students identification. This is because when pupil wear the same type of cloth at an educational institute, it brings every individual on the common platform whether they come from deprived or affluent class. However, some opulent schoolers may try to flaunt their wealth by wearing expensive clothes which can put pressure on other learners to imitate them. Consequently, poor students can feel depressed due to their unaffordability to procure designer attires. For example, a survey in Times of India showed that more than 30% children were tensed because of the fear of maintaining the standard of their fashionable garments. Therefore, unique dress code should be requisite at schools. Additionally, prohibition of school uniforms should not be implemented because in the absence of a particular type of dress, students may feel that their dressing sense will be criticized by peers or schoolers will make fun of them by passing comments. As students have to wear the same school dress, the chances of making fun will be mollified. As a result, learners will become confident about their apparel which is one of rudimentary element of anyone' s personality. To exemplify, the proportion of bullying was least on the basis of clothes in the schools where students have to wear uniforms as compared to educational institutes where pupils have the freedom of wearing clothes of their own choice. Thus, banning of uniform should not be applied in schools. By agglomerating above mentioned viewpoints, it can be concluded that equivalent importance and to diminish inferiority complex among students uniforms should be mandatory in schools. Furthermore, it is recommended that educational organization should encourage their learners to wear a unique dress code which gives the feeling of the part of the institute.
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personality
is obstructed
by
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uniforms
. Owing to this, few
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people
reckon that it should
be prohibited
. This essay disagrees with the statement
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because
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dress
code spreads a sense of equality and assist to alleviate inferiority complex.

To commence with,
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uniform
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helps
to diminish the barriers which may affect
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students
identification. This is
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because
when pupil
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wear
the same type of
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cloth
at an educational institute, it brings every individual on the common platform whether they
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come
from deprived or affluent
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class
.
However
,
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some
opulent schoolers may try to flaunt their wealth by wearing expensive
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clothes
which can put pressure on other
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learners
to imitate them.
Consequently
, poor
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students
can feel depressed due to their
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unaffordability
to procure designer attires.
For example
, a survey in Times of India
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showed
that more than 30% children
were tensed
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because
of the fear of maintaining the standard of their fashionable garments.
Therefore
, unique
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dress
code should be requisite at schools.

Additionally
, prohibition of
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school
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uniforms
should not
be implemented
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because
in the absence of a particular type of
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dress
,
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students
may feel that their dressing sense will
be criticized
by peers or schoolers will
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make
fun of them by passing comments. As
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students
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have to
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wear
the same
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school
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dress
, the chances of making fun will
be mollified
.
As a result
,
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learners
will become confident about their apparel which is one of rudimentary element of
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anyone&
#039; s personality. To exemplify, the proportion of bullying was least on the basis of
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clothes
in the
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schools
where
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students
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have to
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wear
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uniforms
as compared to educational institutes where pupils have the freedom of wearing
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clothes
of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
choice.
Thus
, banning of
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uniform
should not
be applied
in schools.

By agglomerating above mentioned viewpoints, it can
be concluded
that equivalent importance and to diminish inferiority complex among
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students
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uniforms
should be mandatory in
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schools
.
Furthermore
, it
is recommended
that educational organization should encourage their
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learners
to
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wear
a unique
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
code which gives the feeling of the part of the institute.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say uniforms hinder children's personality at school and therefore, it should be banned. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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