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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it v.1

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it v. 1
Dear Mr Siva, I am writing to express my thoughts in working at our company headquarters in Canada for a few months to further enhance my skills and get experience to the Canadian products of our organization so that I can better contribute to my firm and carry out my responsibilities more efficiently. Also, I will get a plethora of international knowledge which will put me one step ahead of all other Indian employees. Also, I assure you that, I will contribute more to the team as I come back to India. As you know, I have been recently promoted to the Technical product architect post and I am working hard to collaborate with my team to enhance the product architecture and increase our brand reputation by supporting multi-tenant applications and software. However, I have been feeling the need to meet and collaborate with our global team members and attend software architecture training sessions that our head workplace in Canada arranges every week. I am quite positive that the opportunity to endeavour in our company’s head office for six months or more will further enhance my knowledge and give me an exposure to the world-wide task-force. I have spoken to Sudhakar and he has agreed to take up my responsibilities during my absence; ideally it will be just one day, as I will be travelling on weekends only. Furthermore, I will check my emails hourly, and be available for emergency phone calls over Skype. Once I get back to the office, I would strive to work extra hours in order to catch up on anything I had missed. Finally, I would need your support to get approval and for edification of mine so that I can work in our company’s head office for six months or more and fulfil the objectives. I look forward to your positive reply. Yours sincerely, Sumant
Dear Mr Siva,

I am writing to express my thoughts in working at our
company
headquarters in Canada for a few months to
further
enhance my
skills
and
get
experience to the Canadian products of our organization
so
that I can better contribute to my firm and carry out my responsibilities more
efficiently
.
Also
, I will
get
a plethora of international knowledge which will put me one step ahead of all other Indian employees.
Also
, I assure you that, I will contribute more to the team as I
come
back to India.

As you know, I have been recently promoted to the Technical product architect post and I am working
hard
to collaborate with my team to enhance the product architecture and increase our brand reputation by supporting multi-tenant applications and software.
However
, I have been feeling the need to
meet
and collaborate with our global team members and attend software architecture training sessions that our head workplace in Canada arranges every week. I am quite
positive
that the opportunity to
endeavour
in our
company
’s head office for six months or more will
further
enhance my knowledge and give me an exposure to the world-wide task-force.

I have spoken to
Sudhakar and
he has
agreed
to take up my responsibilities during my absence;
ideally
it will be
just
one day, as I will be travelling on weekends
only
.
Furthermore
, I will
check
my emails hourly, and be available for emergency phone calls over Skype. Once I
get
back to the office, I would strive to work extra hours in order to catch up on anything I had missed.

Finally
, I would need your support to
get
approval and for edification of mine
so
that I can work in our
company
’s head office for six months or more and fulfil the objectives.

I look forward to your
positive
reply.

Yours
sincerely
,

Sumant
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it v. 1

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