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Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing•describe your suitability for this area of work•say when you can attend an interview v.1

Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing•describe your suitability for this area of work•say when you can attend an interview v. 1
Fees for higher studies are expensive and not affordable for everyone so, according to some university should be free for all people regardless of their background. In my opinion, I agree that educational institutions ought to be free as it will greatly benefit both individuals and humanity. A good reason to abolish university fees is that it gives people, whether they are rich or poor equal rights. At present, students from a poor background are prevented from entering university because they are unable to pay the fees. This excludes a large proportion of society and is discriminating which can be avoided by getting rid of tuition fees. Another point to consider is that having no fees at the academy means that students will no longer have to work at the same time as studying to cover their costs. For example, around three-quarters of all students in the UK have to work either full-time or part-time while studying to pay their fees. Free higher schooling should, therefore, produce better results, as students will be able to afford to apply themselves to their studies exclusively. Finally, the free educational institution will benefit the nation in the long run, for the simple reason that it will open up higher study to a wider section of the population. This will result in increasing the number of educated people. In other words, having a greater resource for succeeding and knowledgeable professionals will bring greater rewards to the community as a whole. Moreover, it can bring more economic advantages to a country that shows itself to be prosperous and leading in various fields. In conclusion, the free educational institution is a must for any country that values equal rights and one that wishes to advance. The cost of free education will be recouped many times over by the benefit it brings.
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Fees
for higher studies are expensive and not affordable for everyone
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so
, according to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
university should be
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free
for all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
regardless of their background. In my opinion, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that educational institutions ought to be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
as it will
greatly
benefit both individuals and humanity.

A
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
reason to abolish university
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fees
is that it gives
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, whether they are rich or poor equal rights. At present,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
from a poor background are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
from entering university
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they are unable to pay the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fees
. This excludes a large proportion of society and is discriminating which can
be avoided
by getting rid of tuition fees.

Another point to consider is that having no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fees
at the academy means that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
will no longer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
work at the same time as studying to cover their costs.
For example
, around three-quarters of all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
in the UK
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
work either full-time or part-time while studying to pay their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fees
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Free
higher schooling should,
therefore
, produce better results, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
will be able to afford to apply themselves to their studies exclusively.

Finally
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
educational institution will benefit the nation in the long run, for the simple reason that it will open up higher study to a wider section of the population. This will result in increasing the number of educated
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
In other words
, having a greater resource for succeeding and knowledgeable professionals will bring greater rewards to the community as a whole.
Moreover
, it can bring more economic advantages to a country that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
itself to be prosperous and leading in various fields.

In conclusion
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
educational institution is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
for any country that values equal rights and one that wishes to advance. The cost of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
education will
be recouped
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
times over by the benefit it brings.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: •explain what you are currently doing•describe your suitability for this area of work•say when you can attend an interview v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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