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You should spend about 40 minutes on this taskCelebrities make a very good living out of media attention and have chosen to live in the public spotlight. They have no right to complain when they feel the media are intruding on their privacy To what extent v.1

Celebrities make a very good living out of media attention and have chosen to live in the public spotlight. They have no right to complain when they feel the media are intruding on their privacy 1
In many counties, it is believed that a clean home is where God likes to live. Some people think that it is necessary to keep you surrounded tidy. In addition, office culture also needs to be keeping the office organized and an item to the appropriate location. The essay is going to narrate importance of it and conclude with an opinion. To begin with, neat house does not allow harmful bacteria and keeps peoples' health. Dust and debris tend to attract germs. It could become places to grow preys. If there are any unused vegetables lying around, it can attract bees and ants, which could grow into a major station of bacteria. In addition, tidy place gives positive vibes and psychological effect. People tend to visit places where they find positive environment. A recent survey in the USA, work force like their clean office and keeps them happy. Moreover, organized place helps to find anything easily. Many people give preferences to keep their desk neat. Firstly, by organizing cabinet, one already knows where to look for which saves time and energy. A lot of logistics companies maintain an online record of goods where simple lookup gives accurate location of the product. So, the business saves money and valuable efforts of their employees. Secondly, correct location of important documents and medicines are handy in an emergency situation. In 2001, Gujarat, a state of India had a dangerous earthquake. We did not have a time to gather any belonging. In that situation, my grandfather’s habit helps us to find passport and travel documents easily. In my opinion, people should be organized wherever they work or live. In the end, it is going to simplify their life.
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live
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people
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think
that it is necessary to
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keep
you surrounded tidy.
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, office culture
also
needs to be keeping the office organized and an item to the appropriate location. The essay is going to narrate importance of it and conclude with an opinion.

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begin
with, neat
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house
does not
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allow
harmful bacteria and
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keeps
peoples' health. Dust and debris tend to attract germs. It could become
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places
to grow preys. If there are any unused vegetables lying around, it can attract bees and ants, which could grow into a major station of bacteria.
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, tidy
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place
gives
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positive
vibes and psychological effect.
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tend to visit
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places
where they find
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positive
environment. A recent survey in the USA, work force like their clean office and
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keeps
them happy.

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, organized
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place
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helps
to find anything
easily
.
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Many
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people
give preferences to
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keep
their desk neat.
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, by organizing cabinet, one already knows where to look for which saves time and energy.
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A lot of
logistics
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companies
maintain an online record of
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goods
where simple lookup gives accurate location of the product.
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So
, the business saves money and valuable efforts of their employees.
Secondly
, correct location of
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important
documents and medicines are handy in an emergency situation. In 2001, Gujarat, a state of India had a
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dangerous
earthquake. We did not have a time to gather any belonging. In that situation, my grandfather’s habit
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helps us to find
passport and travel documents
easily
.

In my opinion,
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people
should
be organized
wherever they work or
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live
.
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In
the
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end
, it is going to simplify their life.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Celebrities make a very good living out of media attention and have chosen to live in the public spotlight. They have no right to complain when they feel the media are intruding on their privacy 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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