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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. v. 4
The number of individuals moving from their undeveloped homelands to developed countries in order to start a job within specialized industries such as engineering, computing, and medicine is on a rise. Some argue that this trend is affecting negatively the poorer countries, while others believe it is a normal step. This essay agrees that moving out is rather beneficial and natural, where it will firstly discuss the benefits to the economy and secondly the positive impact of the international experience on the locals. To begin with, qualified individuals migrating their home for job vacancies from their home country have a positive impact on the economy of the undeveloped countries. In other words, several jobs in different sectors in a poor country do not afford a high number of people demanding a vacancy. While some leave the country, the competition is less, resulting in a decrease rate of unemployment. As a result, the standard of life will improve. For example, half of computer science graduates from India are currently working in the IT sector in Canada due to her shortage of Canadian skills. Moreover, expats returning to their home will also carry with them the high quality experiences hey gained abroad. To put it differently, most immigrants tend to come back home to settle, where they will be part of their country's workforce implementing the international experience. Consequently, the knowledge of the locals will expand and it will be represented in the productivity. The link between Lebanon and the medical sector is a prime example of how Lebanese doctors implement advanced surgery procedures they learned abroad in Lebanon. In conclusion, the movement of qualified people should be encouraged because it is not only advantageous for the local country's economy, but also the knowledge will spread among the locals.
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a job within specialized industries such as engineering, computing, and medicine is on a rise.
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Some
argue that this trend is affecting
negatively
the poorer
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countries
, while others believe it is a normal step. This essay
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agrees
that moving out is
rather
beneficial and natural, where it will
firstly
discuss the benefits to the economy and
secondly
the
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positive
impact of the international experience on the locals.

To
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begin
with, qualified individuals migrating their home for job vacancies from their home
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country
have a
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positive
impact on the economy of the undeveloped
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countries
.
In other words
, several jobs in
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different
sectors in a poor
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country
do not afford a high number of
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people
demanding a vacancy. While
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some
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leave
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country
, the competition is less, resulting in a decrease rate of unemployment.
As a result
, the standard of life will
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improve
.
For example
, half of computer science graduates from India are
currently
working in the IT sector in Canada due to her shortage of Canadian
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skills
.

Moreover
, expats returning to their home will
also
carry with them the high quality experiences hey gained abroad. To put it
differently
, most immigrants tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back home to settle, where they will be part of their country's workforce implementing the international experience.
Consequently
, the knowledge of the locals will expand and it will
be represented
in the productivity. The link between Lebanon and the medical sector is a prime example of how Lebanese doctors implement advanced surgery procedures they learned abroad in Lebanon.

In conclusion
, the movement of qualified
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people
should
be encouraged
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because
it is not
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only
advantageous for the local country's economy,
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but
also
the knowledge will spread among the locals.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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