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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success. ” Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. v.582

“When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success. ” Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. v. 582
We have all heard stories about people who have achieved success in their life, and we often wonder how they did it. Personally, I believe that success is only the result of hard work and perseverance. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. To begin with, success is always the result of hard work over a long period of time. Success happens gradually, and only after a series of correct decisions and small victories. A stroke of luck, in contrast, is generally perceived to be a one-time event. The experience of my uncle, a successful entrepreneur, is a compelling example of what I mean. Since 2005, he has run a very profitable technology firm which manufactures and sells a wide range of products. His business started very small when he invested his savings to develop and market a single product and hire his first employee. When that product became popular, my uncle compounded his success by introducing new products and gradually increasing the size of his company. His company later grew from a single employee to include a staff of dozens. While my uncle might have been lucky at one stage of his company’s growth, the long-term success of his firm cannot simply be the result of good fortune. Secondly, success is usually the result of careful planning, research and education, all of which require a lot of work to achieve. For instance, some people said that my uncle was lucky when his initial product offering was successful. However, he was confident that his product would be a hit even before he started manufacturing it. This is because he spent thousands of dollars on market research and focus groups. It was this investment of time and money, not luck, which assured the early success of his business. Likewise, when his small firm merged with another firm just before that company rose to prominence some called him lucky. However, my uncle had spent weeks interviewing the research and development team at that company and predicted their success based on what they told him. Had he not been confident of their potential, he would not have completed the merger. Again, this victory was the result of diligence rather than luck, despite what some observers say about it.
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people
who have achieved
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success
in their life, and we
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often
wonder how they did it.
Personally
, I believe that
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success
is
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only
the
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result
of
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hard
work and perseverance. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

To
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begin
with,
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success
is always the
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result
of
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hard
work over a long period of time.
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Success
happens
gradually
, and
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only
after a series of correct decisions and
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small
victories. A stroke of luck,
in contrast
, is
generally
perceived to be a one-time
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event
. The experience of my
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uncle
, a successful entrepreneur, is a compelling example of what I mean. Since 2005, he has run a
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very
profitable technology
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firm
which manufactures and sells a wide range of
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products
. His business
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started
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very
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small
when he invested his savings to develop and market a single
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product
and hire his
first
employee. When that
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product
became popular, my
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uncle
compounded his
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success
by introducing new
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products
and
gradually
increasing the size of his
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company
. His
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company
later grew from a single employee to include a staff of dozens. While my
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uncle
might have been lucky at one stage of his
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company’s
growth, the long-term
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success
of his
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firm
cannot
simply
be the
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result
of
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good
fortune.

Secondly
,
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success
is
usually
the
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result
of careful planning, research and education, all of which require
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a lot of
work to achieve.
For instance
,
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some
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people
said that my
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uncle
was lucky when his initial
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product
offering was successful.
However
, he was confident that his
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product
would be a hit even
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before
he
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started
manufacturing it. This is
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because
he spent thousands of dollars on market research and focus groups. It was this investment of time and money, not luck, which assured the early
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success
of his business.
Likewise
, when his
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small
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firm
merged with another
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firm
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just
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before
that
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company
rose to prominence
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some
called him lucky.
However
, my
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uncle
had spent weeks interviewing the research and development team at that
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company
and predicted their
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success
based on what they
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told
him. Had he not been confident of their potential, he would not have completed the merger. Again, this victory was the
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result
of diligence
rather
than luck, despite what
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some
observers say about it.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay “When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success. ” Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position. v. 582

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
384 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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