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Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. What do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. v.7

Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. What do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? v. 7
Fame is a two-edged sword; although it has plethora of positives, one should also be aware about its side-effects. As per my opinion, many well-known public-figures would have seen plenty of challenges due to their distinct lifestyles. This writing will shed some light on the plausible ill-effects of being a public-icon with some pragmatic explanations and examples. Someone has rightly quoted that "Health is Wealth", however attaining a wealthy health is an uphill task for Bollywood stars. In their profession, networking plays a prominent role which is not a child's play to build and maintain. They need to be present in most of the late-night gatherings which proved to be a major obstacle in following a healthy schedule. To exemplify, the John Abraham after his movie 'Force 2' got hospitalized because he was deprived of sufficient sleep for last 3 months. Additionally, there are multiple restrictions on the account of their societal status. In the quest of mitigating their social pressure, they start faking their personality. For instance, Amitabh Bachan who was titled as "The Youth Icon" at the age of 60 years, has to always showcase a spark in his body language despite having an acute pain in his knees at all times. To recapitulate, the reason why common people always try to imitate their favourite stars or sports players is that they are confined to the projected lifestyles of these highly successful personalities. In reality, famous stars also face many issues which are more intense as compared to regular problems of life.
Fame is a two-edged sword; although it has plethora of positives, one should
also
be aware about its
side-effects
. As per my opinion,
many
well-known public-figures would have
seen
plenty
of challenges due to their distinct lifestyles. This writing will shed
some
light on the plausible ill-effects of being a public-icon with
some
pragmatic explanations and examples.

Someone has
rightly
quoted that
"
Health is Wealth
"
,
however
attaining a wealthy health is an uphill task for Bollywood stars. In their profession, networking plays a prominent role which is not a child's play to build and maintain. They need to be present in most of the late-night gatherings which proved to be a major obstacle in following a healthy schedule. To exemplify, the John Abraham after his movie 'Force 2'
got
hospitalized
because
he
was deprived
of sufficient sleep for last 3 months.

Additionally
, there are multiple restrictions on the account of their societal status. In the quest of mitigating their social pressure, they
start
faking their personality.
For instance
,
Amitabh
Bachan
who
was titled
as
"
The Youth Icon
"
at the age of 60 years,
has to
always showcase a spark in his body language despite having an acute pain in his knees at all times.

To recapitulate, the reason why common
people
always try to imitate their
favourite
stars or sports players is that they
are confined
to the projected lifestyles of these
highly
successful personalities. In reality,
famous
stars
also
face
many
issues which are more intense as compared to regular problems of life.
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IELTS essay Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. What do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? v. 7

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  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
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