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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation v.63

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation v. 63
It is a human tendency that everyone wants to get an excellent employment mostly after completing their university and college and looks for such job which can provide financial security and happiness in life. Therefore, job satisfaction, which can be derived based on person’s likeness and earnings, is an important element of any work. First of all, if a person is to like any work, the job needs to have several characteristics such as good salary and bonuses, sufficient hours for rest, healthy workplace and environment, job security and involvement of light physical activities. Ideally, the job should have a scope of work where an employee is given freedom of execution. Importantly, such jobs should also commensurate the monthly payouts to give satisfaction to its holders. With respect to the issue of satisfactory jobs to all employees, it is unlikely that everyone becomes happy with the work he gets. It is important to note that we don’t live and work in an ideal work. The unemployment rate is so high around the world that a well qualified person may have to engage in a work which cannot provide any real satisfaction. However, given the situation, the person may not have any other possibility except to accept such employment. For example, many mine workers are unlikely to enjoy their work in deep, dark and dusty quarry but circumstances are such that they end up working there all their lives. Similar would be the case of many international students working in a café or in a bar to cover their tuition fees. To sum up, many factors such as good salary and safe work environment contribute to job satisfaction. People would definitely choose a workplace where they enjoy working. However, it is not always possible to provide ideal job to everyone. So, many men and women are compelled to do any work to support their families despite the lack of job satisfaction.
It is a human tendency that everyone wants to
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get
an excellent employment
mostly
after completing their university and college and looks for such
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job
which can provide financial security and happiness in life.
Therefore
,
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job
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satisfaction
, which can
be derived
based on
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person’s
likeness and earnings, is an
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important
element of any work.

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First of all
, if a
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person
is to like any
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work
, the
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job
needs to have several characteristics such as
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good
salary and bonuses, sufficient hours for rest, healthy workplace and environment,
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job
security and involvement of light physical activities.
Ideally
, the
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job
should have a scope of
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work
where an employee is
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given
freedom of execution.
Importantly
, such
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jobs
should
also
commensurate the monthly payouts to give
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satisfaction
to its holders.

With respect to the issue of satisfactory
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jobs
to all employees, it is unlikely that everyone becomes happy with the
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work
he
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gets
. It is
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important
to note that we don’t
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live
and
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work
in an ideal
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work
. The unemployment rate is
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so
high around the world that a well qualified
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person
may
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have to
engage in a
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work
which cannot provide any real
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satisfaction
.
However
,
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given
the situation, the
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person
may not have any other possibility except to accept such employment.
For example
,
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many
mine workers are unlikely to enjoy their
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work
in deep, dark and dusty quarry
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but
circumstances are such that they
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end
up working there all their
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lives
. Similar would be the case of
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many
international students working in a café or in a bar to cover their tuition fees.

To sum up,
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many
factors such as
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good
salary and safe
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work
environment contribute to
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job
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satisfaction
.
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People
would definitely choose a workplace where they enjoy working.
However
, it is not always possible to provide ideal
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job
to everyone.
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So
,
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many
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men
and women
are compelled
to do any
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work
to support their families despite the lack of
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job
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satisfaction
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation v. 63

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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