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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.1

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 1
It is undoubted that job satisfaction is always the most crucial factor which gives a strong sense of well-being to people who seem to immerse themselves into work. This essay will first focus on what elements contribute to job satisfaction, and it will then address the question of whether job satisfaction is realistic or not. There are some recognizable factors that have positive influences on how people feel in work. Firstly, good working environment holds a vital position in job satisfaction. Should employees work in friendly and safe environment, they will feel secure because there are no surrounding latent risks such as aggressive coworkers or even downgraded building with a risk of collapse threatening their life. THEREFORE, they can undertake high responsibility for their tasks and collaborate well with colleagues to ACHIEVE BETTER PERFORMANCE. Secondly, promotion opportunity is also an influential motive that satisfies people in work experience. It is believed that some employees are simply interested in their current positions providing that their efforts are recognized by the company and they are given the chance of climbing up the ladder; as a result, they can broaden experience in the higher position. Finally, a company granting generous allowances may make a significant contribution to the job satisfaction of employees BECAUSE OF RESPECT AND APPRECIATION THEY RECEIVE. Unsurprisingly, people always have a high demand for entertainment and relaxation, so even they are entitled to a meagre travel allowance, which can satisfy them a lot. However, there is no possibility that everyone working in different fields can all get job satisfaction owing to the fact that each person possesses their own personality and standpoint and has jobs in various aspects with a distinct environment. Especially, with those who are workers have severe working experience, they can’t get paid as much as their production. Even though staff can work in an ideal workplace, they might be dissatisfied with their work due to stringent regulations and prissy boss. To conclude, it seems to have so many factors that can bring people job satisfaction but I still believe that most of the employees can’t get satisfied with their jobs due to several reasons such as high working pressure, inadequate compensation and average salary.
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is undoubted
that
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job
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satisfaction
is always the most crucial factor which gives a strong sense of well-being to
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people
who seem to immerse themselves into
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work
. This essay will
first
focus on what elements contribute to
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job
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satisfaction
, and it will then address
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the question of whether
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job
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satisfaction
is realistic or not.

There are
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some
recognizable factors that have
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positive
influences on how
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people
feel in
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work
.
Firstly
,
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good
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working
environment holds a vital position in
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job
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satisfaction
. Should
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employees
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work
in friendly and safe environment, they will feel secure
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because
there are no surrounding latent
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risks
such as aggressive coworkers or even downgraded building with a
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risk
of collapse threatening their life.
THEREFORE
, they can undertake high responsibility for their tasks and collaborate well with colleagues to ACHIEVE BETTER PERFORMANCE.
Secondly
, promotion opportunity is
also
an influential motive that satisfies
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people
in
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work
experience. It
is believed
that
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some
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employees
are
simply
interested in their
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current
positions providing that their efforts
are recognized
by the
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company and
they are
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given
the chance of climbing up the ladder;
as a result
, they can broaden experience in the higher position.
Finally
, a
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company
granting generous allowances may
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make
a significant contribution to the
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job
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satisfaction
of
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employees
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BECAUSE
OF RESPECT AND APPRECIATION THEY RECEIVE.
Unsurprisingly
,
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people
always have a high demand for entertainment and relaxation,
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so
even they
are entitled
to a
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meagre
travel allowance, which can satisfy them a lot.

However
, there is no possibility that everyone
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working
in
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different
fields can all
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get
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job
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satisfaction
owing to the fact that each person possesses their
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own
personality and standpoint and has
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jobs
in various aspects with a distinct environment.
Especially
, with those who are workers have severe
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working
experience, they can’t
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get
paid as much as their production.
Even though
staff can
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work
in an ideal workplace, they might
be dissatisfied
with their
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work
due to stringent regulations and prissy boss.

To conclude
, it seems to have
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so
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many
factors that can bring
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people
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job
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satisfaction
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but
I
still
believe that most of the
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employees
can’t
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get
satisfied with their
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jobs
due to several reasons such as high
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working
pressure, inadequate compensation and average salary.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
368 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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