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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation v.31

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation v. 31
Nowadays, people are significantly suffering from sickness due to stress. This essay will discuss the main causes of stress-related sicknesses including work pressures and health problems. This essay will also suggest solutions to these issues, including following physical exercise and maintaining a balanced diet. People are working longer hours than ever before. In addition, they are showing more concern on easy food habits. Being an employee they often come out comfort zone to the psychological condition by working longer hours consuming junk food. For example, people will aspire to get promotion for higher pay to gain a better status ignoring healthy habits. This situation results in mental and physical suffering because they have to work over time and take on additional role which can be stressful. Maintaining a good work life balance and following one's healthy diet are both critical to overcome stress related issues. People need to realize that if they only live for work to get higher pay will suffer physically and mentally and by showing less concern to healthy diet which takes them to unhealthy conditions, For instance people will motivate themselves and follow physical exercises with a healthy diet by ignoring everyone. Therefore, in order to reduce work one must maintain a healthy lifestyle which definitely gives them confidence to overcome difficult situations in real life. To conclude, in this contemporary world, people will face more and more weakness due to stress. This essay discussed how stress-related issues are caused by overwork and not following proper diet. This essay also suggested the solutions to manage better work life balance and eat healthier.
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. This
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will discuss the main causes of
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pressures and health problems. This
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out comfort zone to the psychological condition by working longer hours consuming junk food.
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people
will aspire to
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habits. This situation results in mental and physical suffering
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they
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and take on additional role which can be stressful.

Maintaining a
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work life
balance and following one's
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diet are both critical to overcome
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stress
related issues.
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higher pay will suffer
physically
and mentally and by showing less concern to
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healthy
diet which takes them to unhealthy conditions,
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people
will motivate themselves and follow physical exercises with a
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healthy
diet by ignoring everyone.
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reduce
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work
one
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maintain a
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lifestyle which definitely gives them confidence to overcome difficult situations in real life.

To conclude
, in this contemporary world,
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people
will face more and more weakness due to
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stress
. This
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essay
discussed how
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stress
-related issues
are caused
by overwork and not following proper diet. This
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also
suggested the solutions to manage better
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work life
balance and eat healthier.
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IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation v. 31

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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