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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer. You should write at least 250 words. v.11

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 11
As the majority of the time of people is spent on workplace, contentment from the job is an extremely important. Although, in todays materialistic world, it is difficult to be satisfied from job no matter how perfect it may be. Several factors contribute to it as discussed in this essay. Amongst some of the factors which increase the sense of fulfilment from a particular job Salary is an important aspect. In todays physical world money has become an important part of our life as nothing can be achieved without it, may it be social status, education of children or life style. The importance of salary can be witnessed by the fact that the pay package is an integral part of every job interview. Consequently, the higher pay may ensure or improve contentment from a job. Another essential factor which contributes to job satisfaction is to make sure the job description of the employee is enforced. If a person is employed in a particular post, he should solely be performing that task not others. This is the major cause of frustration amongst workers if they are forced to perform duties other than job description or in addition to their own duties. For example, generally the doctors' primary responsibility is patient, but they are asked to perform administrative tasks when someone from administration is on leave. This has been seen to have a detrimental effect on morale of workers and reduces contentment level. In my opinion, in todays world of competition, it is highly unrealistic to expect job satisfaction from workers. People are seen to switch jobs more frequently in search of better ones and even than are not fully contented. However, awareness amongst the people must be created that hundred percent ideal situation cannot exist and some flaws may exist in every system. In conclusion, contentment from job though difficult to achieve but can be slightly increased by improving pay packages and ensuring the enforcement of job description.
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people
is spent
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contentment
from the
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job
is an
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important
. Although, in
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todays
materialistic world, it is difficult to
be satisfied
from
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job
no matter how perfect it may be. Several factors contribute to it as discussed in this essay.

Amongst
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some of the
factors which increase the sense of
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fulfilment
from a particular
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job
Salary is an
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important
aspect. In
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todays
physical world money has become an
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important
part of our life as nothing can
be achieved
without it, may it be social status, education of children or life style. The importance of salary can
be witnessed
by the fact that the pay package is an integral part of every
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job
interview.
Consequently
, the higher pay may ensure or
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improve
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contentment
from a job.

Another essential factor which contributes to
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job
satisfaction is to
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make
sure the
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job
description of the employee
is enforced
. If a person
is employed
in a particular post, he should
solely
be performing that task not others. This is the major cause of frustration amongst workers if they
are forced
to perform duties other than
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job
description or
in addition
to their
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own
duties.
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,
generally
the doctors' primary responsibility is patient,
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they
are asked
to perform administrative tasks when someone from administration is on
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leave
. This has been
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seen
to have a detrimental effect on morale of workers and
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reduces
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contentment
level.

In my opinion, in
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todays
world of competition, it is
highly
unrealistic to
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expect
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job
satisfaction from workers.
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People
are
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seen
to switch
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jobs
more
frequently
in search of better ones and even than are not
fully
contented.
However
, awareness amongst the
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people
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must
be created
that hundred percent ideal situation cannot exist and
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some
flaws may exist in every system.

In conclusion
,
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contentment
from
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job
though difficult to achieve
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but
can be
slightly
increased by improving pay packages and ensuring the enforcement of
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job
description.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 11

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
327 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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