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Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by news ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress? v.1

Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by news ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress? v. 1
Nowadays, many countries provide regulations to protect their historical place, however, some people still argue that it needs to be replaced with modern buildings. This essay will discuss the importance of taking care historical buildings and explain why it should not stand in the progress of the country. Many old buildings often tell intriguing stories of the country, thus it is incredibly significant to look after them. For instance, the church of England has been standing since 1445 and contain a plethora of events prior the establishment of United Kingdom as a country. Until this date, the building is still being used by many researchers and artists, due to its powerful messages and magnificent arts. Furthermore, these buildings generally attract tourists from all over the world, which allowing the nation to earn more income that will contribute directly to their GDP (Gross Domestic Products). Therefore, taking care of historical buildings is beneficial to the country, as it can help to discover the past events and generate more income. In addition, although history should definitely be remembered and respected by the citizen of the country, it should not stand in the progress. This is due to the fact that it has happened in the past and the country should always be looking forward in order to grow. Many countries these days often produce advance technology such as AI (Artificial Intelligence) or Machine Learning, which was not available a century ago. Hence, incorporating the past with the future generally will prevent the country to grow further as a nation. In conclusion, it is incredibly advantageous to provide laws to protect historical buildings, since it will provide past information and contribute to the country's GDP. Nevertheless, the nation should not let history to stand in the progress, because it will prevent them to be more advanced in the future.
Nowadays,
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people
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why it should not stand in the progress of the country.

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tell
intriguing stories of the
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country
,
thus
it is
incredibly
significant to look after them.
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, the church of England has been standing since 1445 and contain a plethora of
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events
prior the establishment
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of United Kingdom
as a
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country
. Until this date, the
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building
is
still
being
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used
by
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many
researchers and artists, due to its powerful messages and magnificent arts.
Furthermore
, these
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buildings
generally
attract tourists from all over the world, which allowing the nation to earn more income that will contribute
directly
to their GDP (Gross Domestic Products).
Therefore
, taking care of
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historical
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buildings
is beneficial to the
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country
, as it can
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help
to discover the
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past
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events
and generate more income.

In addition
, although history should definitely
be remembered
and respected by the citizen of the
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country
, it should not stand in the progress.
This is due to the fact that
it has happened in the
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past
and the
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country
should always be looking forward in order to grow.
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Many
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countries
these days
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often
produce advance technology such as AI (Artificial Intelligence) or Machine Learning, which was not available a century ago.
Hence
, incorporating the
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past
with the future
generally
will
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prevent
the
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country
to grow
further
as a nation.

In conclusion
, it is
incredibly
advantageous to provide laws to protect
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historical
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buildings
, since it will provide
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past
information and contribute to the country's GDP.
Nevertheless
, the nation should not
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let
history to stand in the progress,
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because
it will
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prevent
them to be more advanced in the future.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by news ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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