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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Studying business or science related subjects at university level is more important than arts related courses like literature. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.55

: Studying business or science related subjects at university level is more important than arts related courses like literature. v. 55
In this present competitive generation, choosing the right path in the education sector at university level is utmost important. Graduating in business or science based subjects has greater priority over arts streams like literature due to the vast career opportunities and broader scope for innovations. I completely agree with the above notion. I would like to provide relevant examples to support my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. On the first hand, study courses like business management or science has tremendous market for career opportunities. The majority of the companies offer management team positions for the students who passed out of these subjects. Moreover, the remuneration paid to these employees with the business management background is also at par when compared to other subjects. For instance, the students graduating from esteemed universities like IIT and IIM's have a greater demand and value in the market. Due to substantial infrastructure facilities and scope for out of the box thinking for new innovations, students are given higher importance to these streams. On the other hand, art subjects like literature are also playing a vital role in representing any countries culture and heritage. However, due to the lesser job market and narrowed scope for improvements towards personal and professional growth, the courses are not being opted by majority of the students. Consequently, the universities are also not providing required infrastructure and resources. For instance, as per the statistics, the number of seats offered by any university management between business and arts subjects is 80: 20. To summarize, Even though, the need for literature and the arts is there, increased career opportunities and enthusiasm to learn new things are the primary factors for students to opt for business management or science courses.
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university
level is utmost
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important
. Graduating in
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business
or science based
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subjects
has greater priority over
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arts
streams like literature due to the vast career opportunities and broader scope for innovations. I completely
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agree
with the above notion. I would like to provide relevant examples to support my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs.

On the
first
hand, study courses like
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business
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management
or science has tremendous market for career opportunities. The majority of the
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companies
offer
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management
team positions for the
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students
who passed out of these
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subjects
.
Moreover
, the remuneration paid to these employees with the
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business
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management
background is
also
at par when compared to other
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subjects
.
For instance
, the
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students
graduating from esteemed
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universities
like IIT and IIM's have a greater demand and value in the market. Due to substantial infrastructure facilities and scope for out of the box thinking for new innovations,
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students
are
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given
higher importance to these streams.

On the other hand
,
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art
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subjects
like literature are
also
playing a vital role in representing any countries culture and heritage.
However
, due to the lesser job market and narrowed scope for improvements towards personal and professional growth, the courses are not
being opted
by majority of the
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students
.
Consequently
, the
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universities
are
also
not providing required infrastructure and resources.
For instance
, as per the statistics, the number of seats offered by any
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university
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management
between
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business
and
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arts
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subjects
is 80: 20.

To summarize
,
Even though
, the need for literature and the
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arts
is there, increased career opportunities and enthusiasm to learn new things are the primary factors for
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students
to opt for
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business
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management
or science courses.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay : Studying business or science related subjects at university level is more important than arts related courses like literature. v. 55

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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