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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.24

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 24
Every country needs an excellent transportation network to provide goods and services to its citizens. Some people argue that the authorities should allocate funds to develop the railway network instead of roads. I can't entirely agree with this notion since both rail and roads should be equally developed to have a better transportation network. Undoubtedly, the train allows travelling a higher number of people compared to other ground transportation methods. In addition to that, it is faster, safer and cheaper than using a private vehicle. Moreover, trains are unlikely to stick in traffic; hence, people who travel on trains can utilise their saved time for something more productive. For instance, in Singapore, the metro network is excellent and works on time. As a result, almost every person is using it for their travel requirements. Speed trains in Europe and Japan are used more often than cars or buses to travel long distances as it is more convenient, cheap and faster. Nevertheless, no one can reach their final destination only by using the railway network. It is a known fact that once you get off from a train either you have to walk or take a taxi to reach the endpoint; hence, the roads are necessary and should connect each endpoint. For example, in Singapore, even though they have an excellent tube network, the streets are built to connect everywhere. Furthermore, for a government to provide emergency services such as fire fighting and ambulance services, there should be a better road network, for the reason that, the trains run on a specific predefined time table. In conclusion, I firmly believe that allocating funds and developing only the railway network is not the solution. The development of road networks should also equally considered to build excellent transportation infrastructure.
Every country needs an
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excellent
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transportation
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network
to provide
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goods
and services to its citizens.
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Some
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people
argue that the authorities should allocate funds to develop the railway
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network
instead
of
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roads
. I can't
entirely
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agree
with this notion since both rail and
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roads
should be
equally
developed to have a better
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transportation
network.

Undoubtedly
, the
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train
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allows
travelling a higher number of
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people
compared to other ground
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transportation
methods.
In addition
to that, it is faster, safer and cheaper than using a private vehicle.
Moreover
,
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trains
are unlikely to stick in traffic;
hence
,
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people
who travel on
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trains
can
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utilise
their saved time for something more productive.
For instance
, in Singapore, the metro
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network
is
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excellent
and works on time.
As a result
, almost every person is using it for their travel requirements. Speed
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trains
in Europe and Japan are
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used
more
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often
than cars or buses to travel long distances as it is more convenient,
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cheap
and faster.

Nevertheless
, no one can reach their final destination
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only
by using the railway
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network
. It is a known fact that once you
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get
off from a
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train
either you
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have to
walk or take a taxi to reach the endpoint;
hence
, the
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roads
are necessary and should connect each endpoint.
For example
, in Singapore,
even though
they have an
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excellent
tube
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network
, the streets
are built
to connect everywhere.
Furthermore
, for a
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government
to provide emergency services such as fire fighting and ambulance services, there should be a better
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road
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network
, for the reason that, the
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trains
run on a specific predefined time table.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that allocating funds and developing
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only
the railway
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network
is not the solution. The development of
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road
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networks
should
also
equally
considered to build
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excellent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
infrastructure.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 24

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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