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Question--> Using points and examples from the talk, describe the two different definitions of tools given by the professor. v.1

Question--> Using points and examples from the talk, describe the two different definitions of tools given by the professor. v. 1
It is incontrovertible that heavy traffic and air contamination are inextricably intertwined with the petrol consumption by vehicles. To tackle these challenges, preventative measures should be applied in addition to the rising the cost of petrol. Conspicuously, driving private cars is one of the main causes of bumper to bumper traffic which leads to pollution. In this favour, there is no doubt that increasing the cost of fuel can contribute to the mitigation of the air pollution, but taking such measure would trigger inflation and transportation fee. It is also interesting to note that should the government impose green taxes on drivers, such decree will oblige them to use public transport systems like bus and underground. Consequently, by doing this, not only do preventing squandering the time of commuters (is prevented), but mitigating the amount of carbon dioxide and other pollutants that we dump into the atmosphere is mitigated. Moreover, by encouraging people to use renewable energy and cleaner fuel, we have more safety and healthy environment. In developed communities, an enormous body of evidence shows that using hybrid cars and hydrogen fuel play a pivotal and dominant role in the reduction contamination specifically in congested cities like London. To sum up, it can be restated that in addition to boosting the price of fuels, other measures such as imposing green taxes on drivers and encouraging people to use renewable energy and cleaner fuels are recommended. I aver that local councils should allocate more budget to create and develop decent public transport which has tremendous positive impacts on citizens and the environment.
It is incontrovertible that heavy traffic and air contamination are
inextricably
intertwined with the petrol consumption by vehicles. To tackle these challenges, preventative measures should
be applied
in addition
to the rising the cost of petrol.

Conspicuously
, driving private cars is one of the main causes of bumper to bumper traffic which leads to pollution. In this
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
, there is no doubt that increasing the cost of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
can contribute to the mitigation of the air pollution,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
taking such measure would trigger inflation and transportation fee.

It is
also
interesting to note that should the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
impose green taxes on drivers, such decree will oblige them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
public transport systems like bus and underground.
Consequently
, by doing this, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
do
After the auxiliary verb 'do', use the base form of a verb. Did you mean "prevent"?
preventing
squandering the time of commuters (is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
),
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
mitigating the amount of carbon dioxide and other pollutants that we dump into the atmosphere
is mitigated
.

Moreover
, by encouraging
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
renewable energy and cleaner
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
, we have more safety and healthy environment. In developed communities, an enormous body of evidence
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that using hybrid cars and hydrogen
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
play a pivotal and dominant role in the reduction contamination
specifically
in congested cities like London.

To sum up, it can
be restated
that
in addition
to boosting the price of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
, other measures such as imposing green taxes on drivers and encouraging
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
renewable energy and cleaner
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
are recommended
. I aver that local councils should allocate more budget to create and develop decent public transport which has tremendous
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
impacts on citizens and the environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Question--> Using points and examples from the talk, describe the two different definitions of tools given by the professor. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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