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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In some countries, governments are encouraging people to use their cars less and to take public transport instead. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and i v.30

In some countries, governments are encouraging people to use their cars less and to take public transport instead. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? 30
The trend of working at home is increasingly being witnessed these days due to the technological development such as laptops and mobile phones. Although working at home enables us to fit our hectic schedules, it can also lead to lack of communication and interaction with colleagues. In my opinion, the positive points of working from home surpass the negative aspects. The crucial beneficial factor of having the opportunity to work at home is that we can have more flexible working hours as people tend to work hard to cement their positions in the fast-paced changing work environment so it can help us to maintain a work-life balance. To illustrate, a recent study conducted in Japan has revealed that nearly 80% of employees believe that working at home is more convenient and efficient compared to the traditional ways. As can be seen, this advantage has a profound impact on the employees. However, every coin has two sides. The main challenge of working at home is that people won’t have many opportunities to socialize with their colleagues which is detrimental to the organization as creating and maintaining a good working environment is significant for generating more revenues. Take myself for example, I tend to put in my best effort to work when I trust my co-workers and enjoy the working environment. For this reason, it could be harmful for the business without the proper guidance. To sum up, people’s opinion seems to differ as to whether or not we should work at home. I’m inclined to say that the overall benefits of working at home are superior.
The trend of
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working
at home is
increasingly
being witnessed
these days due to the technological development such as laptops and mobile phones. Although
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working
at home enables us to fit our hectic schedules, it can
also
lead to lack of communication and interaction with colleagues. In my opinion, the
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positive
points of
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working
from home surpass the
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negative
aspects.

The crucial beneficial factor of having the opportunity to
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work
at home is that we can have more flexible
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working
hours as
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people
tend to
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work
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hard
to cement their positions in the
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fast
-paced changing
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work
environment
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so
it can
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help
us to maintain a work-life balance. To illustrate, a recent study conducted in Japan has revealed that
nearly
80% of employees believe that
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working
at home is more convenient and efficient compared to the traditional ways. As can be
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seen
, this advantage has a profound impact on the employees.

However
, every coin has two sides. The main challenge of
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working
at home is that
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people
won’t have
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many
opportunities to socialize with their colleagues which is detrimental to the organization as creating and maintaining a
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good
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working
environment is significant for generating more revenues. Take myself
for example
, I tend to put in my best effort to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
when I trust my co-workers and enjoy the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
environment.
For this reason
, it could be harmful for the business without the proper guidance.

To sum up,
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people
’s opinion seems to differ
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as to whether or not
we should
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work
at home. I’m inclined to say that the
overall
benefits of
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working
at home are superior.
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IELTS essay In some countries, governments are encouraging people to use their cars less and to take public transport instead. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages? 30

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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