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Write about the following topic. Instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics, governments should spend the money on programmes encouraging the public to be active and stay healthy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. v.4

Instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics, governments should spend the money on programmes encouraging the public to be active and stay healthy. with this statement? v. 4
There is no doubt that these days nations are being attentive to the sports' importance in order to have healthy citizens who are able to work and produce. However, the question: Do governments have to spend more on healthy sessions instead of sponsoring athletes to take part in the Olympic games? Is being a controversial issue nowadays. In this essay I am going to examine this phenomenon from both viewpoints. On one side of the argument, there are people who argue that countries should be presented by perfect players in the Olympics and world wide competitions. The main reason for believing is that the first world countries usually get the first and second ranks in those games while other countries do not get any prizes for any competition or even sometimes they are not nominated to join. Furthermore, it is also possible to say that countries focus on a certain group of young players and sponsor them for years to ensure the perfect representation of their countries. One good example here are some winners in the Olympic games get a lot of money as a result of their winning so they can enjoy something different than others. On the other hand, it is possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact countries, governments should spend more on sports programmes than competitions. People often have this opinion because whenever they invest in the public health and lifestyle, immediately there will be perfect athletes to take part in various games, but the opposite is not applicable. Moreover, creating a healthy nation starting from students and ending up by adults and older people will have a better future effect. A good illustration here is Kuwait. The government is trying to build sports centres in each area and encourage kids to join. Then they are nominating a small number to participate in competitions and games. As a result, the awareness about maintaining a healthy lifestyle all the time is increasing and no need to focus on certain people to push them to participate. To summerize, public health is a major issue nowadays and it does not matter if the country is participating in Olympic games or not at the end it is just a competition. However, having healthy citizens with a high level of awareness is better and I tend to believe that countries should spend on creating the best environment for everyone to do sports and stay healthy.
There is no doubt that these days nations are being attentive to the sports' importance in order to have
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healthy
citizens who are able to work and produce.
However
, the question: Do
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governments
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have to
spend more on
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healthy
sessions
instead
of sponsoring athletes to
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take part
in the Olympic
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games
? Is being a controversial issue nowadays. In this essay I am going to examine this phenomenon from both viewpoints.

On one side of the argument, there are
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people
who argue that
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countries
should
be presented
by perfect players in the Olympics and
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world wide
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competitions
. The main reason for believing is that the
first
world
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countries
usually
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get
the
first
and second ranks in those
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games
while other
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countries
do not
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get
any prizes for any
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competition
or even
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sometimes
they are not nominated to
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join
.
Furthermore
, it is
also
possible to say that
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countries
focus on a certain group of young players and sponsor them for years to ensure the perfect representation of their
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countries
. One
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good
example here are
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some
winners in the Olympic
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games
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get
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a lot of
money
as a result
of their winning
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so
they can enjoy something
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different
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than
others.

On the other hand
, it is possible to consider it with the opposing case. It is
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often
argued that in fact
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countries
,
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governments
should spend more on sports
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programmes
than
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competitions
.
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People
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often
have this opinion
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because
whenever they invest in the public health and lifestyle, immediately there will be perfect athletes to
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take part
in various
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games
,
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but
the opposite is not applicable.
Moreover
, creating a
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healthy
nation starting from students and ending up by adults and older
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people
will have a better future effect. A
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
illustration here is Kuwait. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is trying to build sports
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centres
in each area and encourage kids to
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join
. Then they are nominating a
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small
number to participate in
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competitions
and
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games
.
As a result
, the awareness about maintaining a
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healthy
lifestyle all the time is increasing and no need to focus on certain
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people
to push them to participate.

To
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summerize
, public health is a major issue nowadays and it does not matter if the
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country
is participating in Olympic
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games
or not at the
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end
it is
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just
a
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competition
.
However
, having
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healthy
citizens with a high level of awareness is better and I tend to believe that
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countries
should spend on creating the best environment for everyone to do sports and stay
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay Instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics, governments should spend the money on programmes encouraging the public to be active and stay healthy. with this statement? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
412 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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