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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.21

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? v. 21
The purpose of advertising is to tell the consumer about any new product or work or any new promotion on the existing product and work. We need it so we can make good decisions when we go shopping. Advertising tells us when new and improved products become available and lets us know which ones have the best price. Through advertisements, we learn about new products. For example, many grocery stores now sell prepackaged lunches. These are very convenient for busy parents. They can give these lunches to their children to take to school. Busy parents don’t have time to look at every item on the store shelf, so without advertisements, they might not know about such a convenient new product. Even products we are familiar with may be improved, and advertising lets us know about this. Most people use cell phones, but new types of cell phone service become available all the time. There are different plans that give you more hours to talk on the phone, you can send text messages and photos, and next week probably some even newer type of service will be available. By watching advertisements on TV it is easy to find out about new improvements to all kinds of products. Advertisements keep us informed about prices. Prices change all the time, but everyone can look at the ads in the newspaper and see what the latest prices are. Advertisements also inform us about sales. In fact, some people buy the newspaper only in order to check the prices and plan their weekly shopping. Advertisements improve our lives by keeping us informed about the latest product developments and the best prices. Advertisements serve a useful purpose.
The purpose of advertising is to
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tell
the consumer about any
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new
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product
or work or any
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promotion on the existing
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product
and work. We need it
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we can
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make
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decisions when we go shopping. Advertising
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tells
us when
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new
and
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improved
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products
become available and
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lets
us know which ones have the best price.

Through
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advertisements
, we learn about
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new
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products
.
For example
,
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many
grocery stores
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now
sell prepackaged lunches. These are
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convenient for busy parents. They can give these lunches to their children to take to school. Busy parents don’t have time to look at every item on the store shelf,
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without
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advertisements
, they might not know about such a convenient
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new
product.

Even
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products
we are familiar with may be
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improved
, and advertising
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lets
us know about this. Most
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people
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use
cell phones,
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new
types of cell phone service become available all the time. There are
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different
plans that give you more hours to talk on the phone, you can
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send
text messages and photos, and
next
week
probably
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even newer type of service will be available. By watching
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advertisements
on TV it is easy to find out about
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new
improvements to all kinds of products.

Advertisements
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keep
us informed about
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prices
.
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Prices
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change
all the time,
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everyone can look at the ads in the newspaper and
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see
what the latest
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prices
are.
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also
inform us about sales. In fact,
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some
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people
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buy
the newspaper
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the
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prices
and plan their weekly shopping.

Advertisements
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improve
our
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lives
by keeping us informed about the latest
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product
developments and the best
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prices
.
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Advertisements
serve a useful purpose.
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The limits of my language mean the limits of my world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? v. 21

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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