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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words v.20

Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v. 20
Problems like the climate change, overpopulation and the lack of education are a huge concern. It has been said that as the way a population is rising with declining literacy rate, it would be a severe situation in our country, after a decade. In order to solve this problem, this essay will discuss about, how with the help of our government and by building number of schools and collages, it can be solved. Firstly, the country like India the population growth has always been high. It is due to lack of awareness among the people and a very less number of educated people in the country. It has been seen that if a society is uneducated, there people do not have logical thinking about what could be the consequences of giving, birth to a number of children. For example, a survey done by the Delhi government illustrates that there are over fifty percent of the population in our country are illiterate and most of the families have a number of children than they should have. So, the literacy rate and the overpopulation are directly proportional to each other. This can be solved if the government makes a law which implies that no more than two children are allowed to give birth in a family. This kind of law is already in use by China and the result was in their favour, their population growth has declined now. In addition to that, it can also overcome by reducing literacy rate in our country by constructing a number of public school and colleges. As data given by Literacy Oraganization, shows that children are not able to go to school due less number schools available with affordable fees. So, in order to get rid of this problem, it is needed that our government should open public schools and implement a population control law. In conclusion, Although the amount of literacy rate is decreasing due to a population increase, it can be taken care by educating the uneducated people of our country, and this can be done with the involvement of our government.
Problems like the climate
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change
, overpopulation and the lack of education are a huge concern. It has
been said
that as the way a
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population
is rising with declining
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literacy
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rate
, it would be a severe situation in our
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country
, after a decade. In order to solve this problem, this essay will
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discuss about,
how with the
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help
of our
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government
and by building
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number
of
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schools
and collages, it can
be solved
.

Firstly
, the
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country
like India the
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population
growth has always been high. It is due to lack of awareness among the
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people
and a
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very
less
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number
of educated
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people
in the
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country
. It has been
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seen
that if a society
is uneducated
, there
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people
do not have logical thinking about what could be the consequences of giving, birth to a
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number
of
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children
.
For example
, a survey done by the Delhi
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government
illustrates that there are over fifty percent of the
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population
in our
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country
are illiterate and most of the families have a
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number
of
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children
than they should have.
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So
, the
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literacy
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rate
and the overpopulation are
directly
proportional to each other.

This can
be solved
if the
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government
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makes
a law which implies that no more than two
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children
are
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allowed
to give birth in a family. This kind of law is already in
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use
by China and the result was in their
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favour
, their
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population
growth has declined
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now
.
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to that, it can
also
overcome by reducing
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literacy
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rate
in our
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country
by constructing a
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number
of public
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school
and colleges. As data
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given
by
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Literacy
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Oraganization
,
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shows
that
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children
are not able to go to
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school
due less
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number
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schools
available with affordable fees.
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So
, in order to
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get
rid of this problem, it
is needed
that our
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government
should open public
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schools
and implement a
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population
control law.

In conclusion
, Although the amount of
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literacy
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rate
is decreasing due to a
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population
increase, it can
be taken
care by educating the uneducated
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people
of our
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country
, and this can
be done
with the involvement of our
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government
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
349 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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