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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.1

WRITING TASK 2 Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v. 1
There are many significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education for almost countries around the world, and Vietnam is not the exception. In the next ten years, Vietnam will be faced not only challenges in education but in the climate too. We struggled the problems with the air in the big cities, the pollution in the clean water supply sources in many years. Vietnam families were bored with the changes in education so that the children changed their books in school each generation – I mean each year. All that things needs to be revised at all aspects by the government. The Vietnam government should listen to the professors who devoted their lives for science in these articles. A group of mentors can help to make a long-run strategy, in which we can see our vision in 20 years or more, not like short-run plans as they were. For the environment, articles in the newspapers or the social organisations’s help can be used to educate Vietnamese adults how to keep their environment clean, minimize the pollution, such as rubbish, especially nylons and toxic… with their acknowledgement and spread to the others. It needs all the voices of all the society. Applying the growth of science to test the AQI (air quality index), keeping the factories apply all the rules and punishing those who polluted strongly, even to let them out of the economy. To do all these things have a meaning, Vietnam government needs to save a reasonable portion of the yearly budget, which is, still a quarrel in the Parliament.
There are
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many
significant challenges relating not
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only
to the environment,
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but
population and education for almost countries around the world, and Vietnam is not the exception.

In the
next
ten years, Vietnam will
be faced
not
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only
challenges in education
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but
in the climate too. We struggled the problems with the air in the
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big
cities, the pollution in the clean water supply sources in
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many
years.
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Vietnam families
were bored
with the
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changes
in education
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so
that the children
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changed
their books in school each generation
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–
I mean each
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year
. All that things needs to
be revised
at all aspects by the
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government
.

The Vietnam
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government
should listen to the professors who devoted their
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lives
for science in these articles. A group of mentors can
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help
to
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make
a long-run strategy, in which we can
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see
our vision in 20 years or more, not like short-run plans as they were.

For the environment, articles in the newspapers or the social
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organisations’s
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help
can be
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used
to educate Vietnamese adults how to
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keep
their environment clean, minimize the pollution, such as rubbish,
especially
nylons and toxic… with their
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acknowledgement
and spread to the others. It needs all the voices of all the society. Applying the growth of science to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
the AQI (air quality index), keeping the factories apply all the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and punishing those who polluted
strongly
, even to
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let
them out of the economy.

To do all these things have a meaning, Vietnam
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
needs to save a reasonable portion of the yearly budget, which is,
still
a quarrel in the Parliament.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay WRITING TASK 2 Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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