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Studies show that many criminals have a low of education. For this reason, people that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can ge a job when leave prison. Do you agree or disagree v.1

Studies show that many criminals have a low of education. For this reason, people that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can ge a job when leave prison. v. 1
It is undeniable that a number of offenders tend to perform a bad education. While I accept that educating people in jail is an effective way to tackle with crime rate, I think that other measures are also equally vital. To begin with, there is no doubt that providing education in prison plays a crucial role in decreasing the crime rate. For example, by offering education on vocational training, those criminals are allowed to gain knowledge and specific job skills, all of which are valuable skills in their future. The aim of this educational method is to promote prisoners have more job opportunities after serving a prison sentence and providing a comprehensive understanding about consequences of committing the crime. As a result, approaching with a better education, a vast majority of criminals are less likely to re-offend after being released back into the community. However, I am of the opinion that alternative methods are also important to mitigate crime problems. One solution would be for governments impose stricter punishments on those who commit a dangerous issue. For instance, providing capital punishment with murderer could act as deterrent and would prevent people from breaking the law. Another solution would be for skilled polices go to schools and talk with youngsters about the danger of committing crime and lifestyle in prison. It is better to educate children who are not mature enough and more likely to commit crime when they are in school rather than when being served in jail. Consequently, if these measures could be used, it would have a positive impact on reducing crime. In conclusion, besides providing these educations for offenders, I believe that we could utilize these other solutions to ensure the reduction of the crime rate.
It is undeniable that a number of offenders tend to perform a
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bad
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education
. While I accept that educating
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people
in jail is an effective way to tackle with
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crime
rate, I
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think
that other measures are
also
equally
vital.

To
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begin
with, there is no doubt that providing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
in prison plays a crucial role in decreasing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
rate.
For example
, by offering
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
on vocational training, those criminals are
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allowed
to gain knowledge and specific job
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skills
, all of which are valuable
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skills
in their future. The aim of this educational method is to promote prisoners have more job opportunities after serving a prison sentence and providing a comprehensive understanding about consequences of committing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
.
As a result
, approaching with a better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
, a vast majority of criminals are less likely to re-offend after
being released
back into the community.

However
, I am of the opinion that alternative methods are
also
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important
to mitigate
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crime
problems. One solution would be for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
impose stricter punishments on those who commit a
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dangerous
issue.
For instance
, providing capital punishment with murderer could act as deterrent and would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
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people
from breaking the law. Another solution would be for skilled polices go to schools and talk with youngsters about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
of committing
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crime
and lifestyle in prison. It is better to educate children who are not mature
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enough
and more likely to commit
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crime
when they are in school
rather
than when
being served
in jail.
Consequently
, if these measures could be
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used
, it would have a
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positive
impact on reducing crime.

In conclusion
,
besides
providing these
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educations
for offenders, I believe that we could utilize these other solutions to ensure the reduction of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
rate.
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IELTS essay Studies show that many criminals have a low of education. For this reason, people that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can ge a job when leave prison. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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