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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.8

Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v. 8
Current emerging community and climate challenges around the world clearly state that countries throughout the globe are going to face huge difficulties in coming decades. Moreover, it will create major indirect effects in education also. This essay will describe that kind of abnormality we are going to witness in upcoming years and its prevention process with appropriate support. Firstly, we are not at all conscious about environmental balance which helps to keep entire world as a stable condition. Due to various environmental changes, we are experiencing numerous ups and downs in our daily life. If all of these are going to continue then we are going to meet shortage of drinking water and grain, less rainfall etc. For an example, Corona virus is gradually creating it's strength over human being. Some of the parts of our country have reported the same. Secondly, all these developing a silent but big changes in the education sector. As per medical science, these differences are responsible for the indifferent brain development of a child. Therefore, it is creating impact on the education of students. Thirdly, population control has become vital problems in our country. Resulting most of the people are jobless. As per my opinion, government must create laws or scheme to control populace which will ensure a smooth distribution of job among all. In other hand, we have to take care of our environment along with the urbanization. So that in the upcoming years we can have fresh air, organic food for us as well as our next generation. In conclusion, looking after our surroundings and society is our own task to keep our world green forever.
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Current
emerging community and climate challenges around the world
clearly
state that countries throughout the globe are going to face huge difficulties in coming decades.
Moreover
, it will create major indirect effects in education
also
. This essay will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
describe
that kind of abnormality we are going to witness in upcoming years and its prevention process with appropriate support.

Firstly
, we are not at all conscious about environmental balance which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
entire world as a stable condition. Due to various environmental
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
, we are experiencing numerous ups and downs in our daily life. If all of these are going to continue then we are going to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
shortage of drinking water and grain, less rainfall etc. For an example,
The term "Coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
Corona virus
is
gradually
creating
Did you mean "its" (possessive pronoun) instead of 'it's' (short form of 'it is')?
it's
strength over human being.
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
Some of the
parts of our country have reported the same.
Secondly
, all these developing a silent
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
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big
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in the education sector. As per medical science, these differences are responsible for the indifferent brain development of a child.
Therefore
, it is creating impact on the education of students.
Thirdly
, population control has become vital problems in our country. Resulting most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are jobless.

As per my opinion,
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government
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must
create laws or scheme to control populace which will ensure a smooth distribution of job among all. In other hand, we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
take care of our environment along with the urbanization.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
that in the upcoming years we can have fresh air, organic food for us
as well
as our
next
generation.

In conclusion
, looking after our surroundings and society is our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
task to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
our world green forever.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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